Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The chart illustrates the location and types of dance classes for a young people in a town in australia .

Overall in chart there are four differenert locations pf dance classis. The private stuudio 48% competetion which in on top and otherside college based studios 10% competetion.

The location of dance classic private studios high range competetion which is 48% and other side school halls afters chool 24% and community halls and other 18% and college base studios have 10% . This is group of dance classes in different levels.

The type of dance classes by number of students under 11 to 16 ages childs, the ballet under 11 ages on top 600 students and 11 to 16 ages on bottom levels, have 300 students for a dance Similarly in Modern top level descrease on 300 students and bottom level decrease on 410 numbers of students, and the last one is finally tap which in located in mid top side 11 under ages 450 students and bottom 410 students.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify both chart topics and report several relevant figures, including the 48% share for private studios and the 600 and 300 ballet figures. However, the response only partly summarises the main features: it does not give a clear overview of the age-group contrast, and some comparisons are inaccurate. In particular, modern classes are about 300 students for under-11s and 520 for ages 11–16, not 410; tap is about 450 and 420 respectively. The overview mainly repeats that there are four locations rather than highlighting the largest and smallest venues or the contrasting popularity of dance types by age. Select the key patterns, then check each figure against the chart.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is some organisation: the response begins with an introduction, discusses locations in the next paragraphs, and then turns to dance types. This gives the reader a basic sense of the chart’s two parts. However, progression within the paragraphs is difficult to follow, and several linking expressions are inaccurate or repetitive, such as “other side,” “Similarly,” and “finally.” The final paragraph combines multiple comparisons in a long, unclear sequence, so it is hard to tell which age group each figure refers to. Use one paragraph for location and one for age-group comparisons, with clear topic sentences and consistent references such as “under-11 students” and “those aged 11–16.”

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some task-related vocabulary, including “location,” “dance classes,” “students,” and “private studios,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the meaning unclear: “competition” appears where a proportion or share is intended, while “top” and “bottom levels” are not suitable descriptions of bar-chart values. There are also frequent spelling errors, for example “differenert,” “stuudio,” and “classic,” which reduce clarity. Build a small set of accurate chart terms—such as “accounted for,” “proportion,” “figure,” and “was higher than”—and check spelling and word forms before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, but control is inconsistent, and many sentences contain errors that make relationships between figures difficult to understand. Examples include “there are four differenert locations pf dance classis” and “the ballet under 11 ages on top 600 students,” where articles, sentence structure, and verb forms are missing or faulty. The final sentence also joins several ideas without clear grammatical boundaries. Use straightforward comparative patterns first, such as “The figure for ballet was 600 among under-11s, compared with 300 among older students.” Check articles, plural forms, subject–verb agreement, and punctuation, then add more complex structures once the basic sentence is clear.

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