Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The given pie chart depicting the percentage of people taking the dance classes in australia, in which private studios having 48%, community halls and other 18%, school halls 24% and college based studios 10%. About 300 students under age 11 taking the modern classes while 11-16 age group are about 500 in numbers. While in tap classes 420 students are of 11- 16 years age while 450 are under 11 of age. And in ballet class 600 students are of under 11 in age while 300 students are 11-16 in age. So majoority od under 11 students are involved in ballet class and in second number is 11-16 years of age are in modern class. Leaet majority of under 11 are involved in modern class while the least majority of 11-16 year of age invloved in ballet class. So community halls mostly dealing in modern classes while college base studios mostly dealing with ballet class.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You report several key figures accurately, including the location shares and the age-group numbers for ballet, tap and modern. You also identify the main contrast that younger students favour ballet while older students favour modern. However, the response only partly fulfils the task: it has no clear, concise overview of both charts, and the final claims that community halls mainly offer modern and college studios mainly offer ballet are not supported by the data, which gives locations overall rather than linking venues to dance styles. Some comparisons are also expressed unclearly, such as “second number” and “least majority.” To strengthen the response, summarise the largest and smallest location shares and the contrasting age-group preferences, without inferring relationships the charts do not show.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response includes relevant information from both charts, and the sequence from location percentages to dance types gives it some basic organisation. However, there is no paragraphing to distinguish the overview from the detailed comparisons, and the ideas do not develop in a clear overall progression. Repeated use of “while” and the concluding “So” makes the links between points feel mechanical; the final venue-to-style claims also interrupt the comparison rather than follow from it. Group the information into a brief introduction and overview, followed by a paragraph comparing the age groups across the three styles. Use clear linking phrases such as “By contrast” or “In comparison,” and ensure each reference connects data that the charts actually relate.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “percentage,” “age group,” “involved” and the names of the dance styles, so the main subject is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or awkward, including “least majority,” “second number” and “dealing in modern classes.” Spelling errors such as “majoority,” “Leaet” and “invloved” also make the writing less clear and reduce precision. Aim for standard chart language and accurate forms: describe a share as “accounted for,” a group as “had the highest participation,” and a smaller figure as “the lowest.” Proofreading spelling and avoiding repeated, vague expressions would make the comparisons more effective.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts to combine information using clauses beginning with “while,” and most figures can still be understood. However, sentence structures are limited, and errors occur frequently enough to make some relationships difficult to follow. The opening is a sentence fragment (“The given pie chart depicting…”), and “private studios having 48%” lacks a finite verb. Other problems include “students under age 11 taking” and “11-16 age group are,” where the verb forms and agreement are not controlled. Articles and sentence boundaries are also inconsistent. Practise writing complete sentences with a clear subject and verb—for example, “Private studios account for 48%”—and check agreement, articles and punctuation when comparing the two age groups.

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