Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The pie chart and table illustrate the information regarding The location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Overall, it is seen that private studio are in higher proportion as compared to other, whereas children under 11 are more interested in ballet, while students between 11and 16 are more keen in attending modern classes.

The proportion for private studios significantly hold larger proportion at 48%. Whereas, school hall are seen at 24%. Community halls and others hold 18% of the slice. Moreover, the figure for college based studios hold smallest share as compared to others at 10%.

Moving to remaining details, the figure for students under 11age are more interested in attending ballet classes as compared to other .Whereas, half of this students under 11and 16 are attending this class. Moreover, approximately students of different age groups are attending tap classes. 500 students of age 11-16 are attending modern classes, whereas only 300 pupils under 11 are interested in this class.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main location pattern accurately: private studios account for the largest share (48%), while college-based studios are the smallest (10%). You also make relevant age-group comparisons, including the contrast between younger students’ preference for ballet and older students’ higher participation in modern. However, the overview misstates the older group’s strongest style: 11–16-year-olds have the highest figure for modern, but tap is also substantial, and the response does not clearly compare all three styles. The sentence about “half” of students attending ballet is unclear and does not match the chart’s figures. Include the key numbers for both age groups and describe the tap comparison accurately to make the report more complete and precise.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for the location and class-type data. This gives the reader a basic route through the information. However, progression within the final paragraph is difficult to follow: “Whereas, half of this students under 11and 16 are attending this class” is unclear, and the tap comparison is not explained. Several transitions, including “Moreover” and “Whereas,” are used mechanically or as sentence openings where the relationship between ideas is not clear. Use direct comparisons in a consistent order—for example, ballet, tap, then modern—and connect each pair of figures explicitly. This would make the organisation more coherent and reduce the need for the reader to infer your meaning.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, such as “proportion,” “share,” “attending,” and “age groups,” and you vary the wording for students with “children” and “pupils.” However, the range is limited and several choices or forms are inaccurate, which sometimes makes the meaning awkward: “private studio are in higher proportion,” “hold larger proportion,” and “more keen in attending” are not natural collocations. Repetition of “figure” and “proportion” also limits flexibility. Aim for precise chart language and natural combinations, such as “accounted for,” “participation,” and “the number of students.” Check singular and plural forms in phrases such as “school halls” and “private studios” as part of accurate word use.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mixture of simple statements and longer sentences, including comparisons introduced with “whereas.” However, control is inconsistent, and errors in agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries occur often enough to make some statements difficult to interpret. Examples include “private studio are,” “school hall are,” and “half of this students”; the clause beginning “Whereas” is also left as a fragment. The phrase “students under 11and 16” lacks a clear grammatical relationship between the age groups. Practise forming complete comparison sentences with accurate plural nouns and verb agreement, and use punctuation to join clauses correctly. More reliable control of these basic patterns would make your comparisons much clearer.

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