Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The charts provide the information about the location and types of dance classes which are attending by the participants in Australia. Looking from an overall perspective, it is apparent that the highest proportion of classes attending in the private studios and lowest in the college based studios. In addition, the ballet dance is famous among under 11 year students and modern dance is popular in 11-16 year-old students.

Firstly, private studios are famous locations for dance class in students accounted for 48% , while community halls contributed about 18% , followed by school halls after school time were used 24%. In addition, college-based studios have used for dance practice about 10%.

Secondly, the three types of dance are famous among Australian students, ballet dance is famous among the under 11 year old students , 600 participants and 11-16 year old participants are only 300 participants whereas, the difference between the tap dance participants of under 11 are slightly higher than 11-16 year old participants. Furthermore, 11-16 year old participants were slightly over 500 and under 11 year old are only 300 participants.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover both charts and identify several important features: private studios have the largest share (48%), college-based studios the smallest (10%), and ballet participation is higher among under-11s than among 11–16-year-olds. You also report the main figures for ballet and modern accurately. This meets the task well, with some features more fully reported than others. However, the overview says modern is popular among the older group without making the key comparison explicit, and the tap figures are not given; the claim that under-11 participation is “slightly higher” is also inaccurate, since the older group is slightly higher (about 420 versus 450? Actually the chart shows under-11 tap at about 450 and older students at about 420). To strengthen the response further, state the main age-group contrasts clearly and check that each comparison matches the chart.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an opening overview is followed by one paragraph on locations and another on dance types. Sequencing phrases such as “Firstly” and “Secondly” help readers follow the shift between charts, and the main information is generally grouped appropriately. However, cohesion is sometimes mechanical, with repeated “In addition” and “Furthermore,” and some long sentences join several comparisons without clear punctuation. For example, the sentence beginning “ballet dance is famous…” moves from ballet to tap and then modern, making the relationships harder to follow. Use more precise links such as “By contrast” and “Meanwhile,” and separate the age-group comparisons into shorter, clearly structured sentences.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough task-related vocabulary to communicate the main chart information, including “proportion,” “accounted for,” “contributed,” and “participants.” There is also some useful variation in describing the data. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or repetitive: “famous locations for dance class” and “ballet dance is famous” are not natural ways to describe participation, while “classes attending” is unclear. Repeated use of “participants” and “famous” also limits precision. Choose neutral reporting language such as “accounted for the largest share,” “was the most popular style,” and “students taking classes.” More accurate collocations would make the comparisons clearer and give the vocabulary greater flexibility.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mixture of simple and more complex sentences, including comparisons with “while” and “whereas,” and the overall meaning can usually be understood. However, some errors in sentence structure and verb forms remain. The opening phrase “which are attending by the participants” uses an incorrect passive construction, and “college-based studios have used” lacks the appropriate passive form. Several sentences also contain comma splices or incomplete comparison structures, particularly the long sentence beginning “ballet dance is famous…” and ending with the tap comparison. Improve control by using forms such as “classes attended by young people” and “were used,” and divide multi-part comparisons into complete sentences with clear punctuation.

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