Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The chart depicts the information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

The pie chart displays four different dance locations stating community halls & other, private studios, schoool halls, college-based studios with types of dance classes based on their age group of under 11 and 11-16 ages respectively. On moving into a closure look on to the pie chart it specifies that more a quater percentage of people opt private studios followed by that the next highest stands in the line is school halls with 24%, subsequently goes the community halls & other and lastly college-based studios stand with a mearge percentage of 10.

Between the two age groups students choosing ballet who are under 11 years has the highest count having more than 600 students compared to the students from age 11-16. On the other hand tap makes sures that it is almost equally participated dances class with students almost crossing a bar of 450. However the moderm dance creates its own impact on the youth which gives a clear cut view on the count of students(500) who got enrolled into the dance class.

With this it gives a great closer

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify both the location chart and the age-group chart, and you make some relevant comparisons, such as younger students favouring ballet and older students showing stronger interest in modern dance. However, the account is only partial and several figures or comparisons are inaccurate: private studios account for 48%, not merely “more a quater,” and the highest location share is not clearly reported. The age-group figures are also confused: tap is about 450 for under-11s and 420 for 11–16s, while modern is about 300 and 520 respectively; the response gives only one approximate figure for each. The closing phrase offers no meaningful overview. Select the main contrasts accurately and summarise the overall patterns.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic sequence: an introduction, a paragraph about locations, and one about dance types. This gives the reader some sense of the two chart topics. However, progression within the paragraphs is difficult to follow, and the final line, “With this it gives a great closer,” does not function as a conclusion or overview. Linking expressions such as “On the other hand” and “However” are attempted, but their relationships are not always clear, and the location paragraph strings together several points in an awkward sentence. Organise the response into a clear introduction, an overview of the main patterns, and focused detail paragraphs, using links only where they accurately show contrast or sequence.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “private studios,” “age group,” “participated,” and “enrolled,” and you attempt a range of descriptive expressions. However, word choice and collocation are often inaccurate or unnatural, which sometimes makes the meaning hard to interpret. Phrases such as “moving into a closure look on to the pie chart,” “stands in the line,” and “creates its own impact” do not clearly describe chart data. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “schoool,” “quater,” “mearge,” and “moderm.” Use straightforward, precise reporting language—such as “accounted for,” “was higher than,” and “the number of students”—and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts both simple and more extended sentence forms, for example, “Between the two age groups students choosing ballet…” and “On the other hand tap…”. However, complex attempts are often faulty, and sentence boundaries and punctuation are not consistently controlled. The opening of the second paragraph lacks a clear grammatical structure, while “students choosing ballet who are under 11 years has the highest count” has awkward clause construction and subject–verb agreement problems. The final fragment, “With this it gives a great closer,” is also unclear. Build accurate short sentences first, then add subordinate clauses; check that each sentence has a clear subject and verb and that commas separate introductory phrases appropriately.

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