Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

this chart give informations about many things like location and type of dances classes young people are attending in town in australia. firstly, the graph shows that 600 students under 11 age are attending dances classes of ballet in private studios and college-based studios which is representing 48% and 10% in location wise .On the other hand , 450 students under 11 age are attending tap dance classes in same location and modern dance classes are attending only by 300 students which are also belonging to same age group as previous are attending classes in same location. On comparsion , the huge number of students around 510 of 11 to 16 age groups are attending modern dances classes and around 420 students of same age groups are attending tap dances classes and at last only 300 students are attending ballet dance classes under 11 to 16 age group in town in australia.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the two chart topics and report several figures from the age-group chart, including 600 under-11 ballet students and the approximate figures for older students in modern and tap. However, the response only minimally covers the task: it gives no clear overview of the main patterns and barely reports the location chart. The phrase “in private studios and college-based studios” incorrectly links the 600 ballet students to the location percentages; the charts do not show where each dance-type group attends. The location figures—48% in private studios, 24% in school halls, 18% in community halls and other venues, and 10% in college-based studios—should be described separately. Add a concise overview comparing the age-group patterns, then select and accurately compare key figures from both charts.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response follows a basic sequence, moving from the location chart to under-11 students and then to the 11–16 group. Connectors such as “On the other hand” and “On comparison” show an attempt to guide the reader. However, the information is packed into one long paragraph, and the progression is difficult to follow because location percentages are mixed into the ballet sentence and then treated as if they apply to the other dance types. The repeated “and” clauses also make comparisons feel like a list rather than a structured summary. Use separate paragraphs for an overview and the key details, and group the age-group comparisons clearly. Ensure each linking phrase expresses the relationship between the figures that follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “location,” “age groups,” “attending,” and the dance styles “ballet,” “tap,” and “modern.” This is enough to communicate the general subject, but the range is limited and several phrases are repetitive or imprecise, such as “dance classes” and “students are attending” throughout. There are also noticeable word-form and spelling problems, including “informations,” “comparsion,” and “dances classes,” which reduce clarity and control. Build a more varied set of chart-description expressions, such as “accounted for,” “the largest share,” and “the figure for,” while checking spelling and natural collocations. Use precise terms to distinguish venues from class types.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts to combine information in longer sentences, but the structures are often faulty and make relationships between ideas unclear. For example, “600 students under 11 age are attending dances classes … which is representing 48% and 10%” has problems with articles, agreement, and clause construction. The opening “this chart give” also has subject–verb agreement and capitalization errors, while “students … are attending” is repeated in ways that produce awkward sentence patterns. Punctuation around phrases such as “On the other hand” is inconsistent. Practise accurate simple comparisons first, then add controlled complex clauses. Check singular and plural agreement, articles before age groups, and sentence boundaries so each figure is clearly connected to its correct chart.

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