Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given bar chat elucidates information about the location of dance classes . The chart compares differences categories and present the data in number or percentage . Over all it is clear that there are noticeable differences among the categories shown in the chart . According to the chart the first main activity is community halls and others that percentage is 18 The next activity is School halls is 24 . The next activity is Collage based studios is 10 . The next and the main activity is Private studios is that percentage is 48 . The type of dance classes is under 11 and up 16 . This show a clear comparison among the chart categories . The type of ballet is under 600 and above 300 . The tap is under 450 and above 410 The type of modern is under 520 and above 300 Its show the comparison in the dance classes

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify both the location and dance-type charts and report several relevant figures, including private studios at 48% and school halls at 24%. However, the response gives a list rather than a clear summary of the main features, and the overview (“noticeable differences”) does not explain what stands out. Some comparisons are inaccurate or unclear: ballet is about 600 students under 11 and 300 aged 11–16, while modern is about 300 and 520 respectively; your wording reverses or obscures these age-group figures. Tap is approximately 450 and 420, not clearly “above 410.” To strengthen the report, state the main patterns accurately—for example, private studios are the most common location, and preferences differ by age group—and compare the figures directly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response follows a basic sequence, moving from locations to dance types, and uses simple linking expressions such as “The next activity” and “According to the chart.” This gives the reader some sense of order. However, the ideas are not arranged into clear paragraphs, and repeated sequencing phrases make the report feel like a list rather than a connected summary. The opening and overview also repeat general statements without guiding the reader toward the key comparisons. Group the location figures together, then discuss the age-group data in a separate paragraph. Use clearer links such as “By contrast” to compare age groups, and ensure references such as “This show” clearly identify the feature being discussed.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “percentage,” “location,” “dance classes,” and the names of the dance styles. This is enough to communicate the general subject, but the range is limited and several phrases are repetitive or imprecise, such as “The next activity” and “This show a clear comparison.” There are also word-form and spelling problems, including “bar chat” and “Collage based studios,” which reduce accuracy and polish. Aim for more precise chart language, such as “accounted for,” “the largest share,” “approximately,” and “the number of students.” Use “category” or “venue” rather than repeatedly calling each location an “activity.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

Most of the response uses short, simple statements, and the reader can generally recognise the intended comparisons. However, grammatical errors occur frequently and sometimes make the data relationships difficult to follow. Examples include “The chart compares differences categories,” “The type of ballet is under 600 and above 300,” and “This show a clear comparison”; these contain problems with sentence construction, articles, and subject–verb agreement. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing full stops and spaces around punctuation, while several figures are presented as fragments rather than complete sentences. Practise forming clear comparison sentences, for example: “Among children under 11, ballet was the most popular style, at about 600 students.”

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