Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

the bar chart present the information of australia children attending dance classes

overall,there is four type of dance classes performing by the two age group . it showing mostly young child prefering private studio and less number of student choosing college bases studios. in graph mostly student choosing ballet dancer.

it can clearly seen that 48% of student attending private studio, whil community hall and school halls is the second most attending class amoung young student. in college based studios there is only 10% of taking classes that is very dive percentage .

battet showing the most striking growth of any modes 600 student age of under 11 prefering but 11-16 age young choosing very slump same as in tap ther is significant drop than ballet in age of under 11 but it is go more than afe of 11-16. there is seen very rise increase in modern its remarkable change is more than 500 number odf student. but in age of under 11 there very decrease number of student is choosing the modern amoung thee three catogie.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify both the location chart and the age-group comparison, and you report some key figures accurately: private studios account for 48%, college-based studios 10%, and under-11s take 600 ballet classes. However, the overview is unclear and includes an inaccurate generalisation that students mostly choose ballet; this is true only for the younger group, while modern is highest among 11–16-year-olds. The location comparison also misstates the ranking: school halls are second at 24%, followed by community halls and other venues at 18%, rather than treating them as equally second. Some comparisons are difficult to interpret, and the description of the age-group trends does not consistently identify which group has the higher figure. A clearer overview and more precise comparisons would strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic paragraph structure: an introduction, an attempted overview, and separate discussion of the charts. This gives the reader some sense of how the information is organised. However, progression within paragraphs is weak, particularly in the final paragraph, where ballet, tap and modern are discussed in a confusing sequence. Linking words such as “but,” “while” and “there is” are used, but they do not always show the intended contrast clearly; for example, the comparison of tap between age groups is hard to follow. References such as “it” and “this” are also unclear. Group the figures by age group or dance style, and use explicit comparisons to make the relationships easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary suited to describing data, including “percentage,” “significant drop,” “remarkable change” and “prefering.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or forms make the meaning difficult to understand. For example, “four type of dance classes” confuses the number of dance styles with the chart categories, while “ballet dancer” does not accurately describe participation in ballet classes. Phrases such as “very slump” and “very rise increase” are not natural ways to report trends, and spelling errors—including “battet,” “afe” and “catogie”—reduce clarity. Aim for accurate, conventional chart language such as “the number of students,” “rose,” “fell” and “was the most popular.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

There are attempts to form longer sentences and make comparisons, but control of sentence structure is inconsistent, and frequent errors sometimes make the intended meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “overall,there is four type,” where subject–verb agreement and punctuation are faulty, and “it can clearly seen,” which is missing an auxiliary verb. Articles, plurals and verb forms are also often inaccurate, as in “48% of student attending” and “it showing.” Several sentences run together without clear punctuation, especially the final paragraph, making the comparisons hard to parse. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with clauses using “whereas” or “while,” checking agreement and verb forms.

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