Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The two charts illustrate the types of dance classes performed by youngsters in a town in the Australia.

Overall, private studios attending most classes one and half, while school halls are the second most famous location, meanwhile in types of dance classes most ancestors attend ballet classes, therefore most youngsters attend the modern classes.

Looking in depth, private studios are famous for welcoming individuals to attend dance classes which is 48%. Therefore school halls are second modern location which stands at 24%. Meanwhile community halls and other locations are fare about 18%. In addition the most least location is college-based studio on which most individuals did not prefer for dance.

On the other hand, in types of dancing by age group ballet is most famous for ancestors in which about 600 students participate, therefor this is the lowest type for youngsters in which only 300 students enroll. Moreover in modern classes youngsters attend most which is about 500 pupils, and for births this cheapest type of class who attend only 300. However in tap class both age groups attend by balance which is 400.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You cover both charts and include several relevant figures, such as 48% for private studios, 24% for school halls, and 600 versus 300 students in ballet. However, the overview is unclear and contains contradictory claims: it says most young people attend ballet, then says most attend modern. The chart shows ballet is highest among under-11s, while modern is highest among 11–16-year-olds. Some comparisons are also inaccurate: tap participation is about 450 and 420, not 400 for both groups, and the 11–16 figure for modern is about 520. The location ranking is mostly identified, but the college-based figure of 10% is omitted. Select the main contrasts accurately and summarise them clearly in the overview.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate discussion of the location and age-group charts. This gives the reader a basic route through the information. However, progression is weakened by mechanical or confusing links such as “therefore,” “meanwhile,” and “on the other hand,” which do not always express the relationship between the ideas. The overview also combines conflicting statements, making the main message difficult to follow. Within the final paragraph, the comparisons move between age groups and dance styles without consistently identifying which group is being discussed. Use clearer topic sentences and connect each figure directly to its comparison; ensure pronouns and references identify the relevant age group.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt a range of vocabulary, including “participate,” “enroll,” and “locations,” but word choice and collocation are often inaccurate enough to make the meaning unclear. For example, “ancestors” is used for children, “most famous location” for the most popular venue, and “fare about 18%” for a share of 18%. “This cheapest type” does not describe the number of students, while “one and half” is unclear in the context of the charts. These choices suggest that the vocabulary range is limited and not yet controlled reliably for this task. Prefer precise, familiar chart language such as “accounted for,” “attended,” “the highest figure,” and “approximately,” and check that each word fits the intended meaning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use both simple sentences and attempts at longer structures, including clauses introduced by “while” and “in which.” However, these complex sentences are often faulty, and errors sometimes make relationships between ideas hard to understand. For example, “private studios attending most classes” lacks a clear grammatical subject and verb, while “which is 48%” does not attach clearly to the preceding phrase. There are also problems with articles and sentence construction in “in the Australia” and “the most least location.” Aim first for accurate, complete sentences with a clear subject and verb. Then build longer comparisons using controlled patterns such as “The figure for X was…, compared with…”

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