Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The pie chart illustrates the proportion on the location of dance classes in Austrilia.

Overall, the dance classes in private hall accounts for highest usage for location, while college-based studios remain lowest usage for location. The use of college base studios is approximately 5 times higher than private studios.

Initially, private studios area makes up use for dance classes at 48% which is two times more than school hall. School hall accounts for dance classes at 24%. In contrast, college-based studios use only 10% which is the lowest use for dance classes. Ultimately, Community halls and other use dance classes at 18%.

At ballet dance classes, the aged under 11 number of students about 600 while the aged 11-16 number of students steadily decline approximately 300. At tap dance classes, the number of students is about 480 their aged is under 11 while the aged 11-16 is about 420. Ultimately, the modern dance classes under 11 aged students about 300 while the aged 11-16 number of students is approximately 530.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You cover both charts and include several relevant figures, such as private studios at 48%, school halls at 24%, and the age-group totals for ballet and modern. However, the overview contains a major contradiction: it says college-based studios are “approximately 5 times higher than private studios,” although they are the smallest category at 10% compared with 48%. Some comparisons are also unclear or inaccurate: for tap, the chart shows about 450 students under 11 and 420 aged 11–16, rather than 480 for the younger group. The response reports data but does not clearly summarise the main pattern across dance styles. A more accurate overview and careful checking of comparisons would make the report more complete and clear.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate discussion of the location and dance-type data. This gives the reader a general sense of how the information is organised. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow, particularly in the overview, where the statement about college-based studios contradicts the figures that follow. Linking words such as “Initially,” “In contrast,” and “Ultimately” are used, but several feel repetitive or do not show a meaningful sequence. The final paragraph moves through the three dance styles, yet the comparisons between age groups could be presented more systematically. Grouping the location figures together and then comparing the age groups consistently for each style would improve cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “proportion,” “accounts for,” “approximately,” and “number of students,” so the topic is generally clear. However, the range is limited and several phrases are unnatural or imprecise, such as “the proportion on the location,” “highest usage for location,” and “private studios area makes up use.” Repeated use of “use” and “accounts” also makes the report less precise. There are spelling and word-form problems, including “Austrilia” and “aged” where “age group” or “students aged” is needed. These errors sometimes make the intended comparison harder to understand. Aim for accurate, natural collocations for describing proportions and student numbers rather than repeating general words.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentence forms, including comparisons introduced by “while” and “whereas”-type contrasts, and most of the chart information can still be understood. However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently in basic sentence construction and agreement. For example, “private hall accounts” has a singular verb with a plural subject, while “the aged under 11 number of students about 600” is missing a clear verb and has an awkward clause structure. Phrases such as “college-based studios use only 10%” also lack a grammatical subject or construction that clearly expresses the proportion. Practise complete subject–verb sentences, accurate articles and plurals, and simple comparative structures before attempting longer clauses.

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