Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The pie charts represent the provided information of proportion on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town attending in australia currently.

''Overall, in the general it is clear that the private studios is accounts for higher among them whereas college - based studios are accounts for smallest among the classes other are slightly increase in the terms.

TO begin, in the terms of location in the dance classes private studios is accounts for highest 48% subquently school halls (after-school) is slightly decrease nearly 24% twice of the private studios meanwhile community halls and other is accounts for the 18% in contrast college-based studios is accounts for 10% which is lowest among them.

In the terms of types of dance clases (by age group) under 11 ion the ballet that is dramtically highest among them with 650 meranwhile under 11-16 modern is the highest which it accounts for 520 of students in contrast ballet is the smallest foer 11-16 age groups accounts for 300 students subsquently tap is also slightly increase of the age in under 11 with 490 students modern is the smallest accounts for 300 students between them other are increase slightly.

it shows the categories of young age people which are genrally the student of the australia city

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You cover both charts and identify the main location pattern: private studios are the largest share at 48%, while college-based studios are the smallest at 10%. You also make relevant age-group comparisons, including the high ballet figure for under-11s and the high modern figure for 11–16-year-olds. However, some details are inaccurate: under-11 ballet is about 600, not 650, and under-11 tap is about 450, not 490. The overview is unclear and does not summarise the main contrast across the dance types; the final sentence adds little relevant information. To strengthen the response, give a concise, accurate overview and report the key comparisons more clearly, without unsupported claims such as “other are increase slightly.”

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is an attempt to organise the response into an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for location and dance types. This gives the reader some sense of the two chart topics. However, progression within the paragraphs is difficult to follow, and several linking expressions are repetitive or used inaccurately, including “in the terms,” “meanwhile,” and “subsequently.” The dance-types paragraph moves between age groups and styles without a consistent order, while the final sentence does not develop the comparison. Use one paragraph for location and one for age-group figures, and order each set of comparisons systematically. Clearer sentence boundaries and more precise referencing would make the organisation easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, such as “proportion,” “private studios,” “school halls,” and “age group,” and you attempt to describe comparisons with words such as “highest” and “smallest.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the meaning unclear, for example “in the general,” “slightly decrease,” and “accounts for higher.” There are also frequent spelling errors, including “clases,” “dramtically,” “subsequently,” and “genrally,” which reduce clarity. Build a reliable set of chart-description phrases and check spelling carefully. Prefer precise terms such as “accounted for,” “was the most popular,” and “compared with” rather than repeating awkward comparison language.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt longer sentences and use some comparison structures, but control is limited: many sentences contain errors that make relationships between figures difficult to understand. For example, “private studios is accounts for higher” has problems with subject–verb agreement and verb form, while “college-based studios are accounts for smallest” repeats this pattern. Articles and sentence construction are also inconsistent, as in “in the general it is clear,” and punctuation does not reliably separate ideas. Aim first for accurate simple sentences, such as “Private studios account for 48%,” then combine them using a controlled range of clauses. Check agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence boundaries during revision.

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