Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

This chart illustrate the percentage location of dance classes by young people in australia presently

the proption of those aged under 11 are dancing private studios significantly most common it takes 48 percent which doing ballet they reaches 600 students.

overall, school halls hit 24 percent of location dance classes, most of them

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response identifies the topic and includes two relevant figures: private studios at 48% and school halls at 24%. It also links ballet for under-11s with about 600 students, which matches the chart. However, it does not provide a clear overview of the main patterns or adequately summarise both charts. The age-group comparisons for tap and modern are absent, as are the remaining location figures; the unfinished phrase “most of them” leaves the school-hall point unclear. The response is also substantially below the required 150 words, so there is not enough coverage to fulfil the task. Select the main contrasts from both charts and explain them in complete, supported sentences.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a basic attempt to move from the location chart to a detail about age and dance type, followed by a reference to school halls. This gives the response a small amount of relevant progression. However, the ideas are not organised into a clear summary, and the final phrase, “most of them,” is incomplete and has no clear reference. The opening and following lines also run together without effective sentence boundaries or paragraphing. Use a brief introduction, an overview of the main trends, and a logically ordered set of comparisons. Linking expressions such as “whereas” or “by contrast” could help connect the age-group figures, but they should support complete, clearly sequenced sentences.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some task-relevant vocabulary, including “percentage,” “private studios,” “school halls,” and “ballet,” so the reader can identify the subject and some chart categories. However, the range is narrow, and several word choices or forms are inaccurate: “proption” appears to mean “proportion,” while “the percentage location” and “most common” do not express the intended information naturally. “Hit 24 percent” is also too informal for an academic chart summary. Use precise reporting language and the chart’s category labels consistently, for example, “accounted for” or “was the most popular location.” This would make the limited information clearer and more appropriate to the task.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts simple statements and a relative clause, as in “which doing ballet they reaches 600 students,” but the clause is not grammatically complete and the relationship between the figures is difficult to follow. There are also problems with subject–verb agreement in “This chart illustrate” and “they reaches,” and the opening lacks clear sentence punctuation. The fragment “most of them” further shows that some ideas are not expressed as complete sentences. These errors make the short response harder to interpret, although its basic topic remains recognisable. Practise accurate simple sentence patterns first, then add controlled comparisons, such as “Among under-11s, 600 students take ballet.”

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