Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The pie chart illustrates, give information on the location and types of dance classes young individuals in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Overall, the highest proportion of dance classes are in private studios. The lowest proportion of dance classes are in college-based studios. Whereas the highest types of dance classes attended by age group name are the ballet and lowest attended by age group name are the Tap.

The private studios accounted for 48 percent. However, the school hall is open for dance classes after completing school hours, and it constituted 25 percent. Whereas the community halls and others accounted for 8 percent, and the college-based studios represented 40 percent.

On the other hand, the types of dance classes by age group under 11 to 16. The ballet group has 600 young students under 11 years old. The other 300 students are aged 11 to 16. The Tap group has 450 young students under 11 years old, and the other 420 students are aged 11 to 16 years old. In Addition, the Modern group has 500-plus students aged 11 to 16 years old. Whereas the age 11 students are 300.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the two chart topics and include several relevant figures, such as 48% for private studios and the under-11 ballet figure of 600. However, key data are misreported: college-based studios account for 10%, not 40%, and community halls and other venues make up 18%, not 8%. The overview also incorrectly says tap is the least-attended dance type; the lowest figures are modern for under-11s (300) and ballet for 11–16-year-olds (300), while tap is not the lowest in either group. The modern figures are also confused: 520 is for ages 11–16 and 300 is for under-11s. These inaccuracies and the limited comparison of the charts mean the main features are only partially conveyed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has a basic structure, with an introduction, an overview and separate paragraphs for location and dance types. This gives the reader some sense of how the information is grouped. However, progression is not consistently clear: the overview makes a broad claim about the dance types, but the later paragraph does not clearly organise comparisons by age group or identify the main contrasts. Linking words such as “Whereas,” “However,” and “On the other hand” are sometimes used where the relationship between ideas is unclear, and several sentences begin with “Whereas” without completing a clear contrast. Use topic sentences and group the figures systematically—for example, compare the two age groups within each dance type—and use fewer, more precise connectors.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “proportion,” “accounted for,” “constituted,” and “represented,” which helps describe chart data. The range is nevertheless uneven, and some phrases are awkward or imprecise, such as “highest types of dance classes attended by age group name” and “the other 300 students.” Repetition of “dance classes” and “students” also limits flexibility. Choose concise chart language and use terms consistently: “share” or “percentage” for the pie chart, and “number of students” for the bar chart. More accurate phrasing would make the comparisons easier to understand, especially when distinguishing the age groups and the venues.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences and use present-tense reporting verbs, but control is inconsistent. The opening, “The pie chart illustrates, give information,” combines incompatible verb forms, while “The highest proportion of dance classes are” has a subject–verb agreement problem. Several fragments begin with “Whereas,” including “Whereas the community halls and others accounted for 8 percent,” and “Whereas the age 11 students are 300.” The phrase “the types of dance classes by age group under 11 to 16” also lacks a complete grammatical structure. These errors sometimes make relationships between figures difficult to follow. Practise complete sentences with clear subjects and verbs, and check agreement and punctuation when joining contrasting information.

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