Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The pie chat and table illustrate the data on the location and categories of dance assesments adult individuals in a town in australia are currently attending.

Overall, the highest proportion location of dance classes attend private studios by 48% while the highest rate of ballet type of dance classes that is under 11 and the lowest rate of attending clsses on the locationn was college based studios was 10%.

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AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify two relevant features: private studios account for the largest share of locations (48%), and ballet is especially popular among children under 11. However, the response is far too brief to summarise the charts adequately: it contains 62 words, below the required 150, and stops after “firstly,” without reporting the remaining comparisons. The age-group statement is also incomplete: the chart shows 600 under-11 students in ballet, compared with 300 aged 11–16, but does not give a single overall “highest rate” for ballet across both groups. Include the other location shares and compare all three dance styles by age group, with a clear overview.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response, beginning with an introduction and then an overview signalled by “Overall.” This gives the reader a starting point, but the ideas are not developed into a coherent summary: the response ends with the isolated transition “firstly,” and provides no supporting details or further paragraph. The overview sentence also combines several points in a way that makes their relationships difficult to follow. To improve, use a clear sequence: introduce both charts, summarise the main patterns, then give selected comparisons in a separate paragraph. Avoid leaving a linking word without the point it is meant to introduce.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some task-related vocabulary, including “proportion,” “location,” “private studios,” and “college based studios,” so the topic is recognisable. However, the range is narrow and several inaccurate or misspelled choices make the writing less clear, such as “pie chat,” “dance assesments,” “clsses,” and “locationn.” “Adult individuals” is also an unsuitable description because the chart concerns young people, not adults. Use precise chart language such as “pie chart,” “dance classes,” “students,” “share,” and “category.” Check spelling carefully and choose terms that match the information shown.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt a compound sentence in the overview, but grammatical control is limited and errors sometimes make the relationships between ideas unclear. For example, “the highest proportion location of dance classes attend private studios” lacks a clear grammatical structure; a clearer form would be “Private studios account for the largest proportion of classes.” The phrase “the highest rate of ballet type of dance classes that is under 11” also has problems with sentence structure and agreement. Most of the response consists of short, basic clauses, and the unfinished “firstly,” is not a complete sentence. Practise forming complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and use simple comparisons accurately before attempting longer structures.

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