Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

the chart is shown the information of the two differant things and reporting the main ideas of the following mathers. the group of under 11 and the group of 11 to 16 in the class in a town of australia.

over all view of the chart is that the main ideal destination to the comunicat all around and partion of the area in differant ways.

The chart display the 18% community halls and other for the group of 11 to 16 and 24% is reserved for the school halls and 10% area resorved for the collage based studios. approximatery 48% private studios is resorverd for the private studios.

The comperison between ballet, tap and modern in battel the ratio is less then under 11 dancing classes according to the 11 to 16 dancing classs.

if we talk about tap the ratio is near to under 11 its may be some differance between them. moderan ratio if dainding class 11 to 16 is many more regarding under 11

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify both chart topics and include several location percentages, including 48% for private studios, 24% for school halls, 18% for community halls and other, and 10% for college-based studios. You also make relevant comparisons between age groups, noting that modern is more popular among 11–16-year-olds and that tap figures are similar. However, the overview is unclear and does not accurately summarise the main patterns. The claim that the 18% community-hall figure is “for the group of 11 to 16” is unsupported: the location chart is not divided by age. The ballet comparison is also difficult to interpret, and key contrasts—such as under-11s favouring ballet while older students favour modern—need to be stated clearly and supported with figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to move from an introduction and overview to details about locations and then dance styles, and phrases such as “if we talk about tap” signal a change of focus. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the overview is vague and the paragraphs do not clearly separate the two charts. Several ideas are joined in long, unclear sentences, particularly the location figures in the third paragraph. The final comparisons are presented without a clear sequence or supporting numbers. Organise the response into a brief introduction, a precise overview, and separate detail paragraphs for location and age-group comparisons. Use straightforward links such as “Regarding locations” and “By contrast” to make relationships between the figures explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some task-related vocabulary, including “community halls,” “private studios,” “ratio,” and “comparison,” so the reader can recognise the general subject. However, vocabulary is often basic, repetitive, or inaccurately chosen, which makes several points hard to understand. For example, “main ideal destination” does not clearly describe the largest share of class locations, and “reserved” is not an appropriate way to report the proportions. There are also frequent spelling errors, including “differant,” “comunic at” (written as “comunicat”), “approximatery,” and “moderan.” Build a reliable set of chart-reporting expressions such as “accounted for,” “was the most popular,” and “approximately,” and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to form several complete statements and use comparison structures, for example “the ratio is less then under 11” and “11 to 16 is many more.” However, sentence structures are very limited, and frequent errors in articles, verb forms, agreement, and sentence construction make the meaning unclear. The opening, “the chart is shown the information,” has an incorrect verb pattern; “the chart shows information” would be grammatical. In “the group of under 11 and the group of 11 to 16 in the class,” the relationship between the groups and classes is not expressed clearly. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add controlled comparisons: “Ballet attracted 600 under-11s, compared with 300 students aged 11–16.” Check punctuation and use consistent age-group forms.

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