Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

This pie chart illustrates the information of young dancers in Australia attending the dance classes at different locations.

Young dancers for about 48% are attending the classes at private studios, which is a huge number.

College-based studios have the lowest number of young dancers, i.e., 10% of the total population.

School halls (after school) have an average of 24% dancers, whereas community halls and others have 18% in total of the whole population.

The bar graph here demonstrates the number of dancers by means of age group.

Young dancers under 11 years are more participating in ballet dance, and dancers between 11 and 16 years are more participating in modern dance routines.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the main location figures accurately: private studios are the largest share at 48%, college-based studios the smallest at 10%, and the other two locations are also reported correctly. However, the response only minimally covers the second chart. It notes that under-11s favour ballet and 11–16-year-olds favour modern, but omits the actual comparisons and figures, including the older group’s strong preference for modern and younger children’s higher ballet participation. There is also no clear overall summary bringing the charts’ main patterns together. The response is 112 words, below the required 150, and this limits how fully the information is selected and reported. Include a concise overview and compare the six dance-type figures to develop the report.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic, understandable sequence: it first describes the pie chart and then introduces the bar graph with “The bar graph here demonstrates…”. This makes the shift between the two visuals clear. However, the report is very brief and reads as a series of separate observations rather than a developed summary with a clear overview and progression. Connections between related details are limited; for example, the age-group preferences are stated separately without comparing ballet, tap and modern across both groups. Use an overview paragraph followed by organised detail paragraphs, and link comparisons with phrases such as “by contrast” or “whereas” to make the relationships between figures clearer.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “pie chart”, “bar graph”, “age group” and “private studios”, so the topic is generally clear. There is some variation in wording, such as “attending” and “participating”. However, several expressions are imprecise or unnatural for describing statistical data: “the information of young dancers”, “a huge number” for a percentage, and “an average of 24% dancers”. “Total population” is also misleading because the chart gives proportions of class locations, not population shares. Choose precise reporting language such as “accounted for”, “share” and “number of students”. This would make the vocabulary more accurate and appropriately formal while retaining the clear basic meaning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

Most sentences communicate a recognisable point, and you attempt more than one sentence pattern, including a comparison introduced by “whereas”. However, the range is narrow and several constructions are awkward or incomplete in their grammatical framing. For example, “Young dancers for about 48% are attending” places the percentage unnaturally within the sentence, while “College-based studios have the lowest number of young dancers” does not clearly express the share shown. The final sentence also uses parallel “more participating” constructions that are not well formed. Practise structures such as “About 48% of classes are held in private studios” and “Under-11s are more likely to attend ballet, whereas older students favour modern.” These patterns will help you report comparisons accurately.

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