Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The charts illustrate information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Overall, it is noticeable that the first chart is decribing different location of dance classes in community halls, private studios, school halls and college-based studios. The second one describing the type of dance classes in ballet, tap and modern classes according to number of students.

It is evident that the Private studios of dance classes are 48%. The community halls&other dance classes are at 18%. The School halls (after-school) dance classes are 24%. and the last one, college-based studios of dance classes are 10% currently attending in australia.

A closer look reveals that 600 student that are under 11 are attended in ballet dance classes and other 300 student that 11-16 age group. In the Tap dance classes, 450 students are at under 11 and 420 were at 11-16 age group. On other side, the modern dance classes of 300 student are under age 11 and 510 student are 11-16 age group.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You cover both charts and report the location percentages accurately, including private studios as the largest share and college-based studios as the smallest. You also compare the age groups across ballet, tap and modern, identifying the main contrasts: younger students favour ballet, while modern attracts more older students. However, the overview mainly describes what each chart contains rather than summarising the key patterns, and the figures are not always precise: the older group in modern is about 520, not 510. The response therefore addresses the task, but some important features are under-developed. Make the overview more analytical by highlighting the leading locations and the contrasting age-group preferences, then check each figure against the chart.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, an overview, a paragraph on locations and a paragraph comparing dance types. This makes the information reasonably easy to follow, and phrases such as “A closer look reveals” help signal a shift to detail. However, the overview repeats the chart categories rather than guiding the reader through the main comparisons, and some links between details are awkward, as in “On other side.” The location figures are presented as a list, with little grouping or comparison. To improve progression, organise details around the most and least popular locations, then compare age groups within each dance style using consistent linking phrases.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “private studios,” “school halls,” “age group,” and the dance-style names, so the topic is generally clear. There is some variation in reporting language, such as “illustrate,” “evident,” and “reveals.” However, the range is limited and several phrases are inaccurate or repetitive, including “different location of dance classes” and “dance classes are at 18%.” Spelling and word-form slips such as “decribing” and “attended” also reduce precision. Aim for natural chart language and vary how you describe proportions and student numbers; for example, say that a share “accounted for” a percentage and that students “attended” a class.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a few different sentence patterns, including an introductory sentence and comparisons between age groups, but control is inconsistent. Several sentences are fragments or lack a main verb: “The second one describing…” and “The community halls… dance classes are at 18%.” There are also problems with agreement, articles and verb forms, as in “600 student that are under 11 are attended” and “300 student that 11-16 age group.” Punctuation is uneven, particularly the lower-case sentence beginning “and the last one” after a full stop. These errors sometimes make relationships between figures difficult to interpret. Practise complete subject–verb sentences and accurate plural forms, then use a few controlled comparative structures.

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