Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chart illustrates that the knowledge on the location and catagries of dance classes adults in a town in Australia are recendly attending.

Overall, private studios had the highest percentage on the location of dance classes, while college-based studios recorded the lowest figure. In types of dance classes, the ballet was the highest number of students who under 11, whereas in modern had the lowest number of childrens who under 11.

In location of dance classes, private studios stood at approximately 48%, while the school halls had the second highest proportion, at approximately 24%. The figure for community halls and other were almost 18%, compared with 10% in college- based studios.

In type of dance classes, the number of under 11 children in ballet was just over 600, compared with 300 students who aged 11 to 16. The figure of under 11 students in tap was just under 460, whereas 11 to 16 age child stood at around 430. In modern, the percentage stood at 300 student under 11 and 520 children 11 to 16 aged.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

The response covers both charts and gives a clear overview of the main location pattern: private studios are highest at 48%, while college-based studios are lowest at 10%. It also identifies the key age contrast in the dance types, noting that ballet is most popular among under-11s and modern among 11–16-year-olds. Most figures are reported accurately, including the approximate student totals. However, the overview is incomplete: it does not state that tap is nearly equal across the age groups, or that the older group’s highest figure is modern. The opening also mistakenly describes the participants as adults, although the charts concern young people. Including these comparisons more explicitly would make the coverage more complete and better developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The four-paragraph structure is appropriate: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for the two charts make the information easy to follow. The response generally moves from the broad patterns to supporting figures, and comparisons such as “compared with 300” help connect data points. Some cohesion is less controlled, however. The overview focuses on under-11s and does not clearly summarise the older group, while the final paragraph lists figures without a strong concluding comparison. Repeated openings such as “In location…” and “In type…” also make the progression somewhat mechanical. Use clearer links between the age groups—for example, explain that ballet declines with age while modern rises—to create a more continuous comparison.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The response uses relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “proportion,” “approximately,” and “stood at,” and it attempts to vary how figures are described. However, noticeable spelling and word-choice problems limit precision: “catagries” and “recendly” are misspelled, and “knowledge on the location” does not express the intended meaning. Some collocations are also awkward, such as “the highest number of students who under 11” and “the figure … were almost 18%.” The repeated use of “figure” and “stood at” further narrows the range. Aim for accurate, natural reporting phrases such as “the number of students aged under 11” and “accounted for,” while checking spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

There is some variety in sentence forms, including a contrast with “whereas” and comparisons using “compared with,” and the overall meaning is usually recoverable. However, errors in sentence structure and agreement recur. For example, “the highest number of students who under 11” is missing a verb, and “the figure for community halls and other were” has a singular–plural mismatch. The phrase “300 students who aged 11 to 16” also lacks the required verb form, while “300 student under 11” has an agreement error. Articles and age-group constructions are not consistently controlled. Practise building accurate comparison sentences with forms such as “the figure for students aged…” and “there were…,” then proofread each sentence for agreement and missing verbs.

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