Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie chart and the bar graph illustrates the different areas of dance classes are held in a Australian town and the number of young people who are choosing different type of dance in age wise respectively.

Overall, privet studios take the major proportion which is almost half and other locations shares the rest of the area. By the age group ballet is the most dominating part among the children and modern dance is fevourite to the teenagers.

Private studios have the most dominating part which almost half of the figure. 48% of people prefer privet studios rather than the other option. Also school halls have decent percentage of people where the dance classes are hold after the school. In community hall and other share a good amount of proportion which is 18% just 6% less than school halls. However, college-based studios have the least percentage than all other option.

In the terms of different kind of dance ballet is the most preferable option for the children under 11. Around 600 children choose ballet over tap and modern dance. on the other hand, teenagers choose modern dance rather than ballet. Around 500 people choose modern dance while, only around 300 teenagers choose ballet. Tap is the most stable in terms of choosing the buffer option for both children and teenagers. The numbers are almost the same like around 430 and 460 teenagers and children choose this option respectively.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You cover both charts and give a clear overview: private studios account for the largest share, while ballet is most popular among under-11s and modern among 11–16-year-olds. The key comparisons are generally accurate, including the 48% for private studios, the 600 under-11 ballet students and the roughly 300 older ballet students. You also identify college-based studios as the smallest category. This selection and reporting of main features is effective. However, some details are imprecise: the tap figures are about 450 for under-11s and 420 for older students, but you reverse these in your final sentence and describe tap as a “buffer option,” which is unclear. More precise comparisons and a little less generalisation would strengthen the report.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a coherent overall arrangement: an introduction, an overview, then separate paragraphs for location and dance type. This makes the two charts easy to follow, and linking expressions such as “Overall,” “On the other hand” and “However” help signal relationships. Cohesion is less successful within some sentences, though. For example, “In community hall and other share a good amount of proportion” does not clearly connect the category to its figure, and “Tap is the most stable in terms of choosing the buffer option” interrupts the comparison rather than clarifying it. Some transitions are also mechanical or awkwardly placed. Use clearer references to the age groups and organise each comparison around the relevant figures to make progression smoother.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “proportion,” “percentage,” “preferable” and “college-based studios,” and you attempt to vary wording rather than repeat the chart labels throughout. However, inaccurate word choice and collocation are noticeable and sometimes make the meaning unclear. “The most dominating part” is repeated and is not a natural way to describe a chart category; “buffer option” does not communicate the intended point about tap. There are also spelling errors such as “privet” and “fevourite,” alongside imprecise phrases such as “good amount of proportion.” Aim for standard chart-reporting language and check spelling carefully. More accurate choices such as “largest share,” “popular choice” and “similar numbers” would make the comparisons clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and more complex sentences, including contrast structures such as “while” and “on the other hand,” and the overall meaning is usually recoverable. Some grammatical errors remain, however. The opening has subject–verb disagreement in “The pie chart and the bar graph illustrates,” and “in a Australian town” has an article error. Other examples include “other locations shares” and “the dance classes are hold,” where agreement and verb form are incorrect. Sentence boundaries and punctuation also need attention: “on the other hand” begins a sentence without a capital, and the comma in “while, only around 300” is misplaced. Review agreement, articles and passive verb forms, then proofread punctuation.

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