Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Task 1

The charts illustrate the information about the percentages and number of students involved in the dance classes.

The pie chart describes the percentage among different sectors of the society. Private sector recieves highest percentage among other sectors. Schools got 24% in dance classes. College have recieved 10%. Community and other recieves 18%.

The bar graph illustrates the number of students involved into different categories of dance. Ballet group of dance has selected by the highest numbers of students specially of aged under 11. Whereas age group 11 to 16 have lower than others. Tap group of dance students has almost equal number of prefrance to both dances. Modern group of dance has opposite of ballet group, the n umber of student of aged 11 to 16 has more than of aged 11.

In coclusion, it is clear that number of students are more interested in modern dance classes, whereas the percentage of private individuals are more as compared to other sectors.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You cover both charts and identify several relevant comparisons, including the largest location share (private studios) and the contrast between age groups in ballet and modern. However, some key details are inaccurate or unclear: the pie chart shows locations, not “sectors of the society,” and the conclusion that students are more interested in modern classes is not supported overall, since ballet has the highest combined enrolment. The statement that ballet is selected by the highest number is true only for the under-11 group, not for both age groups. Tap numbers are fairly close, but they are not equal. A clearer overview and more precise reporting of the main patterns would strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, a paragraph for each chart, and a concluding sentence. This makes the information reasonably easy to follow. You also use basic linking expressions such as “Whereas” and “In conclusion” to signal contrasts and closure. However, progression is sometimes weakened by unclear references, particularly “lower than others” and “opposite of ballet group,” which leave the comparison imprecise. The conclusion also repeats a claim about modern dance rather than drawing together the chart’s main patterns. Organise the bar-chart details by age group or by dance style, and use explicit comparisons such as “among under-11s” and “among 11–16-year-olds” to make connections clearer.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “percentage,” “bar graph,” “age group,” and “number of students,” so the topic is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, such as “percentage among different sectors of the society,” “involved into,” and “prefrance to both dances.” These expressions make some comparisons difficult to interpret. There are also spelling errors, including “recieves,” “coclusion,” and “n umber,” which reduce accuracy. Use precise chart language—for example, “share,” “enrolment,” “attended,” and “compared with”—and check spelling and word forms. Avoid describing the chart as showing social sectors when it categorises class locations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a contrast with “Whereas” and a sentence beginning “In conclusion.” The main meaning is usually recoverable, but errors in sentence structure and grammatical forms occur repeatedly. For example, “Private sector recieves highest percentage” needs an article and a clearer noun phrase, while “College have recieved 10%” has subject–verb agreement and tense problems. In “Ballet group of dance has selected,” the passive construction is incomplete, and “the number of student … has more” is not grammatically formed. Build accurate comparison sentences with a clear subject and verb, such as “Private studios account for the largest share” and “Modern attracts more older students than younger ones.”

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