Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given pie charts and graph elaburate the information about the location and types of daance classes young people in a town in auastralia and those currently attending reporting all the main features with relevent comparisons.

To begin with locations of dance academies those have high number of classes that is private studios 48% and minimum persentage is 10% of college based studios in addition we have two types more community half & other and school halls after school they bhoth have average numbers 18% and 24%.

On the other side we have types of dance classes by age groups three kinds of dance ballet, tap and mordern start age with under 11 they are more interesting in ballet then Tap and then Mordern with 600,450,300 numbers however age group of 11 to 16 highest students in Mordern is 500+ then Tap 400+ and then Ballet with approximetly 300.

overall, the main point of view Ballet dance famous in under 11 age with 11 to 16 age students interesting in Mordern dance with the use of private classes more and college based too low.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover both charts and identify several important features: private studios are the most common location (48%), college-based studios the least common (10%), and the leading dance style differs by age group. The figures for the younger group are reported accurately, and your older-group figures are close to the chart. However, the overview is not fully clear: “private classes more” could mean private studios are the most popular location, while “college based too low” is imprecise. The comparison between the two age groups could also be developed further, especially the shift from ballet being highest among under-11s to modern being highest among 11–16-year-olds. A clearer overview and more precise comparisons would strengthen the report.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph about locations, a paragraph about dance types, and a concluding overview. This makes the two chart topics easy to distinguish. You also use basic signposting such as “To begin with,” “On the other side,” and “overall.” However, some links feel mechanical, and the long opening sentence is difficult to follow because it combines the task description with an unclear statement about reporting features. Within paragraphs, comparisons are sometimes presented as a list rather than connected into a clear progression. For example, the age-group paragraph would be easier to follow if each group’s ranking were stated and then directly contrasted. Use clearer sentence boundaries and linking phrases that show comparison.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “age groups,” “highest,” and “approximately,” and the reader can generally understand the intended comparisons. However, the range is limited and several word choices or spellings reduce precision. “Dance academies” is not the same as the chart’s class locations, and “average numbers” does not accurately describe the 18% and 24% shares. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “elaburate,” “daance,” “auastralia,” “relevent,” and “mordern.” Phrases such as “more interesting in ballet” and “main point of view” are not natural in this context. Aim for precise reporting language such as “accounted for,” “the most popular style,” and “students were more interested in.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, and the main comparisons can usually be understood. However, some sentences are incomplete or joined in ways that make their grammatical relationships unclear. The opening sentence, for example, has no clear main clause after “The given pie charts and graph,” while “those have high number of classes” is not a well-formed description. In “they both have average numbers,” the reference and sentence structure are unclear, and the final overview uses fragments such as “Ballet dance famous in under 11 age.” Articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries also need attention. Practise writing one complete sentence for each key comparison, checking that each has a clear subject and verb before adding subordinate clauses.

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