Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given pie chart demonstrates the percentage of people in four differnt type of locations. In addition, the illustrated bar chart compares the number of students of two different age groups joined three different type of dances.

It is apparent that maximum number of students learn dance at private studios,moreover, maximum number of learners of age under 11 was learning Ballet.

In detail, the percentage of student at private studios was 48. However 24% of student was joining dance classes in school halls. However in college based studios and community halls and others percentage of students attending dance classes was 10 and 18, respectively.

largest number of students of age under 11 was learning ballet, 600, while of age group 11 to 16 only 300 student was learning ballet. Number of students age under 11 and between 11 and 16 in modren dance classes was 300 and just more than 500, respectively.However in tap classes student of both age groups was just more than 400.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover both charts and report several accurate figures, including the 48% attending private studios, the 24% in school halls, and the ballet figures of 600 for under-11s and 300 for older students. You also identify the main contrast in ballet participation. However, the overview is incomplete: it does not highlight that modern is most popular among 11–16-year-olds, while ballet leads among under-11s. The tap comparison is also unclear, since the figures are about 450 and 420 rather than both being just over 400. A more complete overview and precise comparisons across all three dance styles would make the key features clearer and better developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, a brief overview, and details about the location and age-group charts. This gives the reader a coherent overall arrangement. However, the progression within the details is not always smooth. The repeated use of “However” to introduce figures does not show a clear contrast, and the final sentence combines both age groups’ tap figures without distinguishing them. Some punctuation spacing, such as “studios,moreover” and “respectively.However,” also interrupts the flow. Grouping the location figures in one paragraph and comparing the dance styles systematically in another, with clearer links such as “by contrast” where appropriate, would improve cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “compares,” “age groups,” and “respectively,” so the topic is generally clear. There is some repetition of “students” and “dance classes,” and several word choices or collocations are awkward, such as “four different type of locations” and “joined three different type of dances.” Spelling errors in “differnt” and “modren” also reduce accuracy. Choose more precise expressions such as “venues,” “attended,” and “dance styles,” and use “proportion” when describing the pie chart. A broader, more natural range of chart language would make the comparisons more fluent and precise.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, for example, “In addition, the illustrated bar chart compares…” and the sentence contrasting ballet figures across age groups. However, grammatical control is uneven. There are errors in number agreement and articles in “four different type” and “24% of student was joining,” as well as an awkward verb form in “students … joined three different type of dances.” The sentence beginning “largest number” also lacks an article, and the final comparison has unclear sentence structure. Punctuation is inconsistent, particularly where sentences run together after full stops. Check subject–verb agreement, plural forms, and sentence boundaries when editing.

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