Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given pie chart illustrates the data of four different location of dance classes in a town in Australia. Consequently, bar chart describe the three types of dance classes with the comparision in the attendace of two age groups.

Overall, the locations of dance classes held with the significant proportion of the chart in private studio. While college-based studio demonstartes extermely small percentage of the chart. Moreover, the ballet dancedescirbe bar chart descirbe

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the two chart types and mention the main location feature: private studios account for the largest share, while college-based studios have the smallest. However, the response stops before it reports the dance-class figures or makes meaningful comparisons between the age groups. The unfinished phrase about ballet does not communicate a clear trend, and there is no complete overview of the bar chart. The response therefore addresses the task only minimally, with very limited relevant information. It is also substantially below the required 150 words, leaving too little space to summarise both charts. To improve, complete the overview and report key comparisons, such as younger students favouring ballet while older students attend more modern classes.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: the opening introduces both charts, and “Overall” signals an overview. The use of “Consequently” and “Moreover” also shows an attempt to connect ideas. However, the response ends abruptly, and the ideas do not progress into a complete summary. The sentence beginning “Moreover” is unfinished, so the reader cannot follow the intended point about the bar chart. The relationship between the two chart descriptions is also unclear. Use a clear sequence—introduction, overview, then a paragraph for location figures and one for age-group comparisons—and ensure each sentence is complete and each linking word expresses the intended relationship.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “pie chart,” “bar chart,” “age groups,” and “proportion,” and you attempt more formal wording such as “significant proportion.” This gives the response a minimally adequate range for introducing the visuals. However, several noticeable spelling and word-choice errors make parts difficult to understand: “comparision,” “attendace,” and “demonstartes” are misspelled, while “the data of four different location” is an awkward phrase. The repeated use of “chart” and “dance classes” also limits variety. Aim for accurate, natural expressions such as “the proportion of classes held at each venue” and “the number of students attending each style.” Proofreading spelling and collocation would make your meaning clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a contrast introduced by “While.” However, grammatical control is inconsistent. In “bar chart describe,” the subject and verb do not agree, and the second sentence lacks an article before “bar chart.” The “While” clause is not joined to a complete main clause, and the final sentence is incomplete, preventing the intended meaning from being expressed. The opening also has an awkward plural construction in “four different location.” These errors, together with the limited number of complete sentences, restrict the range and clarity of the writing. Practise forming complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check articles, plurals, and agreement before finishing.

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