Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie chart and horizontal bar chart illustrate the venues and categories of dance classes presently taken by young people in Australia.

Overall, three categories of dance were represented in the bar chart: ballet, tap and modern dance, by two age groups-under 11 and 11 to 16 years. It was shown that the highest number of under 11 young people were involved in ballat dance with about 600 people while those above 11 were more interested in modern dance.

These young people also preferred to take their dance classes in private studios than in college-based studios which was least prefered

It was also noticed there was a reduction in the number of young people under 11 with the evolution of dance from ballet to tap then modern music as the number fell from about 600 people interested in ballet to approximately 450 in tap then 300 in modern dance.

The reverse is noticed for those aged between 11 and 16. There is a steady

increase from 300 persons involved in ballet to about 420 persons in tap then above 500 in modern dance.

In conclusion, as the interest in categories of dance classes evolved, so did the locations as more people(48%) preferred private studios while 41% prefered to use other halls in the community and school halls. only 10% used college based studios.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You cover both charts and identify the main contrasts: private studios are the most common venue, college-based studios the least common, and the age groups show opposite patterns across the dance styles. The figures for the bars are reported accurately, including the approximate 600, 450 and 300 for under-11s and the rise from 300 to over 500 among 11–16-year-olds. This gives the response a clear overview supported by relevant data. However, the final comparison combines school halls and community halls as 41% without making clear that this is a total of two separate categories, and “as the interest … evolved, so did the locations” suggests a relationship the charts do not show. Keep the overview precise and avoid implying a connection between the charts.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview and separate discussion of the age-group figures. The progression from under-11s to older students is easy to follow, and phrases such as “The reverse is noticed” help signal a comparison. However, the overview paragraph combines several points in a long, loosely connected sequence, and the final “In conclusion” repeats venue information while introducing an unclear link between dance styles and locations. Some transitions are also mechanical or imprecise, such as “It was also noticed” and “as the interest … evolved.” Organise the overview around the two main chart findings, then use distinct paragraphs for venue proportions and age-group comparisons, with clearer references between ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of task-related vocabulary, including “venues,” “categories,” “reduction,” “steady increase” and “preferred,” and the reader can understand the comparisons. There are also attempts at more formal reporting language. However, some choices are inaccurate or awkward: “evolution of dance” does not naturally describe differences in student numbers, and “modern music” changes the chart’s category from modern dance. “Persons involved” is less natural than “students taking classes,” while “least prefered” is both an unsuitable form and misspelled. Check spelling and choose precise terms that match the chart labels. More consistent use of “students” and “dance styles” would make the report clearer and more natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentences, including clauses with “while” and “as,” and most of the intended comparisons remain understandable. However, errors in agreement, sentence boundaries and punctuation recur. For example, “three categories … was represented” should use a plural verb, and “These young people also preferred … which was least prefered” has an unclear relative clause and mismatched reference. The sentence beginning “The reverse is noticed” is followed by a broken line and would read more smoothly as one complete sentence. The final paragraph also has a sentence fragment after the full stop in “halls. only 10%.” Use shorter, controlled sentences and check subject–verb agreement, clause links and capitalisation.

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