Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given chart illustates about different locations of dance classes those are distributed by age group and by tpes of dance. So the following diagram describe a huge figure of young children those age is under 11 take interest in ballet classes which location is private studios and on the comparison of comunity hall just half of this figure take part there in ballet class which only took by above 11 to 16. The tap dance type is also much popular among children as chart says, those classes held in private studios and comunity hall too as graph shows littel bit difference among numbers which are 400 to 405 of under 11 and above 11 -16 children age group. As followed by graph the modern dance are also much popular among children of age above 11-16 the numbers of students are minumm 505 which location is also in comunity halls because as per chart describe comunit halls has many others factors which can fascilitates others dance types too despite only 300 children take intrest in this type whose age are under 11 took their classes in private studios.The big differences which i see in this whole chart is between ballet dancing and modern dancing , in ballet dancing the children of under age 11 take their classes in private studios the numbers of students there is around 600 as per graph and in comunity halls majority of classes among dance tpes is modern dance type which is took only by above 11-16.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response identifies several relevant features, including the high participation of under-11s in ballet and the greater popularity of modern dance among 11–16-year-olds. However, it only minimally reports the charts and does not give a clear, accurate overview of both sets of data. Several claims are unsupported or misread: the charts do not connect dance types to locations, so statements that particular classes are held in private studios or community halls cannot be inferred. The location chart’s key figures—private studios at 48%, school halls at 24%, community halls and other at 18%, and college studios at 10%—are not accurately summarised. The response also gives tap figures as 400–405 rather than approximately 450 and 420. Focus on the actual comparisons shown and avoid inventing links between charts.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is some attempt to group information by dance type and to compare the two age groups, but the ideas are not arranged coherently overall. The response is one long paragraph, and its progression is difficult to follow: it moves from ballet to tap, then modern, and then returns to ballet without a clear overview or consistent structure. Linking phrases such as “As followed by graph” and “The big differences which i see” do not clearly signal the relationship between points. References such as “this figure” and “there” are also unclear, especially when the response shifts between locations and age groups. A clearer sequence—an overview, followed by a paragraph on locations and one on dance types—would make the comparisons easier to understand.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses a basic range of task-related vocabulary, including “dance classes,” “age group,” “popular,” and “numbers of students,” so the general subject is usually recognisable. However, vocabulary is repetitive and several inaccurate or misspelled forms make the account harder to read, such as “illustates,” “tpes,” “comunity,” “littel,” and “minumm.” Some expressions are also imprecise for describing chart data: “huge figure” and “take interest” do not convey the comparisons naturally, while “many others factors” is vague. Use standard chart language and precise terms for proportions and quantities. For example, describe a category as “accounting for” a percentage, or say participation “was higher among” one age group.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts longer sentences and comparisons, but its range is limited and complex sentences are often faulty, which sometimes makes the intended meaning difficult to follow. For example, “So the following diagram describe a huge figure of young children those age is under 11 take interest” combines clauses without correct agreement or a clear grammatical structure. There are recurring problems with subject–verb agreement (“the modern dance are”), articles and plurals (“the numbers of students there is”), and sentence boundaries, particularly in the long sentence beginning “As followed by graph.” These errors are frequent enough to affect clarity, even though the reader can identify some intended comparisons. Build shorter, complete sentences first, then add controlled comparative clauses and check agreement and punctuation.

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