Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The information about the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending is predicted by rendered charts.

Overall, there is a huge part of students in private studios and in college base studios have lower number of students. In ballet dance under eleven age students significant more and high number of students in modern class from eleven to sixteen age groups.

In ballet dance class under 11 age group students consist of 600 and 11 to 16 age group consist half of it. In tap dance class consist 450 students in under 11 and modestly change in 11 to 16 that is 425. In last modern dance class include 300 in under 11 and a significant jump is observed in 11 to 16 age group that is 525.

In private studios accounted 48% number of students. Secondly, a large proportion of them in school halls which is making for 24%. Thirdly, community halls and other shares of them is accounting for 18%. At last, college base studios include sharing is 10%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You cover both charts and include several relevant figures, such as 48% for private studios, 600 ballet students under 11, and the rise in modern dance from 300 to about 525 among the older group. The overview also identifies private studios as the leading venue and notes the age contrast in ballet and modern dance. However, the overview is not fully clear: saying college-based studios have a “lower number” does not identify that they are the smallest share, and the key contrast that tap is more popular among older students is omitted. The opening claim that the information is “predicted” is also inaccurate. Select the main comparisons more precisely and summarise them clearly before giving details.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, a paragraph on dance types, and a paragraph on locations. This helps the reader distinguish the two charts, and sequencing words such as “Secondly” and “At last” show an attempt to organise the venue figures. However, progression within the overview is difficult to follow because it combines venue and age-group comparisons in one unclear sentence. The repeated “In … dance class” openings make the details sound list-like, while “Secondly,” “Thirdly,” and “At last” are mechanical rather than showing meaningful relationships. Use clearer topic sentences and connect comparisons directly—for example, contrast the age groups within each dance type, then summarise the venue ranking.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “proportion,” “accounted for,” “significant,” and “age group,” and the reader can generally identify the categories being described. However, word choice and collocation are often inaccurate or unnatural, which sometimes makes the meaning difficult to interpret. Phrases such as “predicted by rendered charts,” “huge part of students,” and “college base studios” do not express the intended ideas naturally. “Modestly change” is also unsuitable for describing the small difference in tap participation. Aim for precise chart language and check whether verbs and nouns combine naturally; for example, use “accounted for 48%” or “the largest share” rather than constructions such as “include sharing is 10%.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer comparative sentences, and the reader can recover several intended comparisons. However, sentence structures are frequently faulty, and errors in agreement, articles, and verb forms often make the writing difficult to read. For example, “there is a huge part of students … and … have lower number” does not form a clear grammatical comparison, while “students consist of 600” uses an unsuitable structure for reporting a figure. In “community halls and other shares of them is accounting for 18%,” the subject and verb do not agree, and the sentence pattern is incomplete. Practise reliable chart-reporting frames such as “There were 600 students in…” and “X accounted for…,” then check each sentence for a clear subject and verb.

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