Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The pie chart shows the breakdown of different locations of dance classes which are chosen by students whereas the second chart compares the different dance types selected by different age groups .
Looking first at bar chart , 600 students under 11 are interested in choosing ballet however the numbers goes half for age group 11-16 . The proportion for Tap is almost same for both which is more than 400 . For the Modern dance 300 students are up for it for first group and its almost double for second group .
Meanwhile for the dance location , 48% students prefers to go private studios and the percentage goes exactly half for school halls . College based studios have very less percentage of willing students which is 10% whereas for the community hall and other dance locations the percentage goes upto 18% . Large group of students prefers to go private studios and least are willing to go college based studios .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0
You cover both charts and identify several important comparisons: ballet is higher among under-11s (600 versus 300), tap is similar for the two groups, and modern is higher among 11–16-year-olds (520 versus 300). The location figures are also reported accurately, including private studios as the largest share and college-based studios as the smallest. However, the response does not give a clear overall summary bringing the main patterns together, and some comparisons are imprecise: tap is about 450 versus 420, rather than simply “more than 400,” while modern for the older group is not quite double the younger figure. Develop the overview and state the key contrasts more precisely to make the report more complete.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5
The response has a clear overall arrangement: it introduces the two charts, discusses the age-group data, and then turns to class locations. Phrases such as “Looking first” and “Meanwhile” help signal these shifts, and the reader can follow the comparisons. This is a solid progression, though the organisation is not fully effective because there is no distinct overview paragraph identifying the main patterns before the details. Some linking is also repetitive, particularly the repeated use of “whereas” and “for.” Grouping the age comparisons into a more parallel sequence and separating the overview from the supporting figures would make the cohesion more flexible and the report easier to scan.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
You use relevant vocabulary for describing charts, including “breakdown,” “compares,” “percentage,” and “age group,” so the meaning is generally clear. There is also some variety in how you describe the figures. However, several expressions are imprecise or unnatural for an academic report, such as “students are up for it,” “willing students,” and “the percentage goes exactly half.” “Interested in choosing” also suggests preference or intention that the chart does not establish; neutral terms such as “attend” or “the number of students” would be more accurate. Aim for precise, conventional chart language and avoid conversational phrasing. This would strengthen the range and control of your vocabulary.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
You attempt a mixture of simple and more complex sentences, including comparisons joined with “however” and “whereas,” and the main information remains understandable. Some grammatical errors persist, especially with subject–verb agreement and articles: “the numbers goes” should be “the number goes,” and “48% students prefers” needs a construction such as “48% of students prefer.” There are also missing articles in phrases such as “at bar chart” and “for the Modern dance,” as well as inconsistent punctuation around sentence openings. Work on agreement with plural subjects, article use, and sentence punctuation while retaining your attempts at varied structures; these corrections would make the report more accurate and fluent.
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