Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie chart and bar graph illustrate the distinct sites of dancing learning used by Australian youngsters, and the types of dance classes different ages of youngsters are take part in, respectively.

Overall, private studios is serving as the most popular dancing location among young Australians. Whilst, children under 11 years of age are partcipating in Ballet and Tap dance classes in more numbers, compared to the Youngsters aged above 11. Modern dance classes are more popular among the older teenagers.

Firstly, private studios is serving as location for 48% of dancing classes's site in Australian countryside, followed by schools halls which hold 24% of classes. moreover, 18% of dance lessons are being provided in community halls and others place, whilst only 10% of total dacnce sessions are being practiced in college-based studios.

On the other hand, Ballet dance classes have higher enrollment of kids under 11 years of age at 600 candidates, whilst 300 of c

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main location pattern accurately: private studios lead at 48%, followed by school halls at 24%, community halls at 18%, and college-based studios at 10%. You also give a useful overview of the age contrast in dance preferences. However, the response does not fully report the bar-chart data: the final paragraph is cut off after “300 of c”, and the figures for tap and modern are not described in the body. The overview also says under-11s take ballet and tap “in more numbers,” although tap is slightly higher among the 11–16 group (about 420 versus 450 for under-11s, so the younger group is in fact slightly ahead). Develop the comparisons accurately and complete the account of all three styles.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for the location and dance-type charts. This gives the reader a clear general route through the information. Linking expressions such as “Overall,” “Firstly,” and “On the other hand” help signal stages, although “On the other hand” does not establish a strong contrast with the preceding location data. Some connections are mechanical, and the final paragraph ends abruptly, leaving the bar-chart discussion incomplete. Improve progression by grouping the age comparisons together—for example, compare ballet first, then tap and modern—and use references that clearly connect each figure to its age group. This would make the organisation more complete and cohesive.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a reasonable range of task-related vocabulary, including “private studios,” “college-based studios,” “enrollment,” and “popular,” and the reader can generally understand the intended comparisons. However, several choices are unnatural or imprecise: “dancing learning,” “classes’s site,” and “serving as location” do not collocate naturally in this context. Repetition of “youngsters” and “dance classes” also limits flexibility, while spelling slips such as “partcipating” and “dacnce” reduce accuracy. Prefer straightforward chart language such as “venues,” “accounted for,” “participation,” and “enrolment.” More precise wording would help distinguish the proportion of classes held at each venue from the number of students attending each dance style.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of sentence forms, including a complex opening sentence and comparisons using “whilst” and “compared to.” The overall meaning is usually recoverable, but some grammatical errors affect clarity. For example, “private studios is serving” has subject–verb disagreement and an unsuitable continuous form; “the types … youngsters are take part in” combines incompatible verb forms; and “children under 11 years of age are participating … in more numbers” has an awkward comparative construction. The final sentence is also incomplete. Use simple, controlled reporting structures such as “Private studios account for 48%” and “More under-11s take ballet than 11–16-year-olds.” Check agreement, verb forms, and sentence completion, while retaining a few accurate complex comparisons.

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