Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

the chart show that

community hall and others are 18% from over all where the age groups who are attending the community hall and others are 11 to 16 they will attend the different classes according to their juniors

they are more modern advanced and mature compared to their juniors

and they 10% collage based studios are there and in other hands school halls

after school percentage 24% where private studios percange 48%

under 11 age group

modren student aprox 500 out of 700

ballet 600/700

tap 450/700

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify several relevant figures, including 18% for community halls and other venues, 10% for college-based studios, 24% for school halls and 48% for private studios. You also report the under-11 figures for ballet and tap. However, the response is very incomplete: it gives no clear overview of the main patterns, omits the 11–16 figures and does not accurately report the under-11 modern figure, which is about 300 rather than 500. The claim that older students attend community halls is not shown by the charts. The response is 88 words, below the required 150, which limits how much of the task is addressed. Include both charts, compare the age groups, and summarise the key contrasts.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.0

There is a basic attempt to group information, first mentioning venue percentages and then turning to the under-11 dance figures. However, the ideas are not developed in a clear sequence, and the response lacks an introduction and a concluding overview. The line about community halls and age groups is difficult to follow, while phrases such as “and in other hands” do not clearly connect the comparisons. The isolated heading “under 11 age group” also interrupts the flow. Organise the response into short paragraphs: introduce what each chart shows, give an overview of the main patterns, then compare venue shares and dance preferences using clear linking phrases such as “whereas” and “by contrast.”

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “age groups,” “private studios,” “school halls,” and the dance styles “modern,” “ballet” and “tap.” These terms help identify the chart categories, and percentages and student counts are attempted. However, spelling and word-choice errors are frequent, including “percange,” “collage,” “modren” and “over all.” Some expressions are also imprecise or unnatural, such as “from over all” and “according to their juniors,” making the intended comparisons unclear. Use the chart’s exact labels and practise accurate forms such as “overall,” “college-based,” and “percentage.” More precise comparison vocabulary, for example “accounted for” and “was more popular among,” would help describe the data clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The response attempts simple statements and a longer comparison, but sentence structures are mostly incomplete or poorly controlled. For example, “the chart show that” has subject–verb disagreement and introduces no complete statement, while “community hall and others are 18% from over all where the age groups…” combines several ideas without a clear grammatical structure. Articles, plurals and punctuation are also inconsistent, and several lines are fragments rather than complete sentences. These problems sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to understand. Build accurate short sentences first—for example, “Private studios account for 48% of classes”—then combine comparisons with controlled clauses such as “whereas” or “while.” Check agreement, sentence boundaries and punctuation when editing.

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