Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

THE pia charts provide data on the area and kinds of dance lesson youth individual in a town in australia are currently attending.

OVERALL, IT CAN BE SEEN THAT, THE LOCATION OF DANCE CLASSES WAS PRIVATE STUDIOS IA HIGHEST ATTENDING AND COLLEGE-BASED STUDIOS WAS LOWEST. HOWEVER, THE TYPES OF DANCE CLASSES AGE GROUP WAS UNDER 11 MOST.

TO BEGIN WITH, IT CAN BD NOTICED THAT , THE LOCATION OF DANCE CLASSES PRIVATE STUDIOS WAS APPROXIMATELY 48% AND COLLEGE-BASED STUDIOS WAS ONLY 10%.MOREVER, SCHOOL HALLS ARE 24% AND COMMUNITY HALLS & OTHER JUST 18%.

ON THE OTHER HAND, THE TYPES OF DANCE CLASSES BY AGE GROUP WAS BALLET ARE UNDER 11 APPROXIMATELY 600 AND 11-16 AGE GROUP HALF TO 300. FURTHERMORE, TAP WAS UNDER 11 WAS ABOUT 450 AND 11-16 WAS SOLELY DROPPPED TO 410.MODERN WAS UNDER 11 ALMOST 510 AND 11-16 NEARLY 300.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the two chart topics and report the location percentages, including private studios as the largest share (48%) and college-based studios as the smallest (10%). However, the overview that the under-11 group attended the most is unclear and not supported by a comparison of totals; the dance figures instead show different preferences by age. Several figures are misreported: modern for under-11s is about 300, not 510, while modern for 11–16-year-olds is about 520, not 300. Tap for the older group is approximately 420, so 410 is close. The response also contains 135 words, below the required 150, and the eight copied prompt words are excluded from that count. Add a clearer overview and accurate comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic overall structure: an opening, an overview, and separate discussion of location and dance types. Linking phrases such as “To begin with” and “On the other hand” help signal movement between points. However, progression within the dance-type paragraph is difficult to follow because the comparisons are compressed into fragments, and “On the other hand” does not clearly express the relationship between the charts. Some connections are mechanical, while punctuation and spacing—for example, “10%.MOREVER”—interrupt the flow. Use one paragraph for each chart, group the age comparisons consistently by dance type, and connect figures with clear comparison language such as “whereas” or “by contrast.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant terms, including “private studios,” “school halls,” “community halls,” and “age group,” so the reader can recognise the subject and several categories. However, the range is limited and some word choices or collocations make the meaning unclear: “youth individual,” “area,” “was highest attending,” and “solely dropped” are not natural ways to describe these charts. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “pia,” “morever,” “bd,” and “droppped.” Prefer precise chart language such as “proportion,” “accounted for,” and “number of students,” and check spelling carefully. More accurate vocabulary would make the comparisons easier to understand.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt an overview and several comparison sentences, but the response relies on a narrow range of sentence patterns, and frequent errors sometimes obscure relationships between the figures. For example, “the location of dance classes private studios was approximately 48%” lacks a clear grammatical link between the category and its percentage; “the types of dance classes by age group was ballet are” also has faulty sentence structure and agreement. In “Tap was under 11 was about 450,” the repeated verb makes the comparison difficult to parse. Use straightforward, complete clauses—for example, “Private studios accounted for 48% of classes”—and check subject–verb agreement, articles, and punctuation. Varying sentence structures is useful, but accuracy should come first.

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