Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

the pie chart and bar graph illustrarets the location and types of dance classes attending by young people in a town in australia.

looking from a overall perpective the people were more intersted to attended classes in private studios.while the ballet was the most popular dance class among the children under 11.whereas modern dance classes participated more age of 11-16.

first of all,the students attending dance classes in private studios was more facinated to attended the class which was 48%.while the students attended the dance classes after-school was half of the private studios at 48%.Moreover community halls and other people intersted was18% which was dipped off by 8% in college -based studio.

Rest of the data,the ballet was the most enjoyable class among the children under 11.which was on 600 number.Likewise age of under 11 followed the decreasing trend.while the age of under 11-16 followed the increasing trend.Afterward modern classes was highest number in age of 11-16.approximately 500.Moreover ballet and modern classes were remain same number of students in the age of 11 and 11-16.represting 300.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the two chart topics and give a relevant overview: private studios are the leading location, ballet is most popular among under-11s, and modern leads among 11–16-year-olds. You also include several figures. However, some comparisons are inaccurate or unclear. After-school classes are 24%, not half of the 48% for private studios, and the claim that ballet and modern have the same numbers across the age groups is incorrect: ballet is 600 versus 300, while modern is 300 versus about 520. The description of the age-group trends is also vague. To make the summary more complete and reliable, report the location shares accurately and compare the main differences between age groups directly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic structure, moving from an introduction and overview to location details and then dance types. This gives the reader some sense of how the charts are being covered. However, progression within paragraphs is uneven, and several linking expressions do not clearly show the relationship between ideas. For example, “Rest of the data” does not introduce the next section naturally, while repeated “Moreover” and “while” make connections feel mechanical. Some sentences combine unrelated comparisons, and the final statement is difficult to follow. Use one paragraph for location and another for dance types, and organise each around clear comparisons, supported by accurate referencing and simpler transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “private studios,” “after-school,” “college-based studio,” and “popular,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, such as “fascinated to attended,” “classes participated,” and “which was dipped off.” Spelling errors, including “illustrarets,” “perpective,” and “represting,” also reduce clarity. Aim for precise chart language rather than describing students’ feelings: for example, say that a class “accounted for” a percentage or was “attended by” a number of students. Check spelling and use consistent terms for the age groups and class types.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts some longer sentences and contrast structures, including “while” and “whereas,” but these are often faulty, and many sentences have errors that make the comparisons harder to understand. Examples include “the students attending dance classes in private studios was” (subject–verb agreement), “the ballet was … which was on 600 number” (unclear clause structure), and “ballet and modern classes were remain same number” (incorrect verb form). Articles, plurals, and sentence boundaries are also inconsistent. Build accuracy first with clear simple sentences, then add controlled comparisons: “Private studios accounted for 48%, whereas school halls accounted for 24%.” Review past-tense forms, agreement, and punctuation when editing.

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