Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Two charts are provided to represent the attendance of dance classes according to their location and the type in a town in Australia.

The pie chart shows that the highest number of people prefer to attend classes in private studios (i-e 48%), whereas college-based studios only receive 10% of students. However, other locations, such as community and school halls, account for 18% and 24% respectively.

The graph demonstrates the number of students and the type of dance classes they are attending. For example, Ballet dance is the most common among students under 11 years of age, and 600 students are taking the classes and least common among people aged between 11 and 16. Moreover, there is no much difference in the number of students attending tap classes among categories of under 11 and aged 11 to 16. Furthermore, the modern dance type is mostly enjoyed by arounf 500 students of 11 to 16 years of age and approximate half of this number are people under 11, who are going in this class.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main location pattern accurately: private studios are the largest share at 48%, while college-based studios are the smallest at 10%, and you report the other two percentages correctly. You also make relevant comparisons across the age groups, including the similar tap figures and the contrast in ballet participation. However, the response lacks a clear overall summary of the most important patterns, and some comparisons are imprecise: ballet for ages 11–16 is about 300, not simply the “least common” without specifying the comparison, while modern for under-11s is about 300 rather than “half” of roughly 500. Include the key figures consistently and summarise the contrasting age-group preferences more clearly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response is arranged in a sensible order: it first describes the pie chart and then moves to the bar graph. Paragraphing helps distinguish the two sets of information, and linking expressions such as “However,” “Moreover,” and “Furthermore” make the relationships between points visible. This gives the report a coherent overall structure. To make the progression more controlled, add a concise overview before the detailed comparisons and group the age data by the clearest contrasts. Some transitions feel mechanical, and the final sentence is long, combining the modern figures for both age groups in a way that makes the comparison less easy to follow. More precise referencing would also help readers track which age group each figure describes.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of task-related vocabulary, including “attendance,” “account for,” “common,” and “number of students,” so the chart information is generally understandable. There are also attempts to vary phrasing, such as “prefer to attend” and “mostly enjoyed.” However, some choices are imprecise or unnatural for an objective report: “the highest number of people” refers to a percentage, and “the type in a town” is vague. “There is no much difference” and “going in this class” are also awkward collocations, while “arounf” is a spelling error. Aim for concise statistical language such as “accounted for the largest share” and “participated in modern dance”; this would improve precision and naturalness.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, including clauses introduced by “whereas” and “who,” and the main meaning is usually clear. Some grammatical errors remain, but they rarely prevent understanding. For example, “there is no much difference” has an incorrect determiner, and “Ballet dance is the most common … and 600 students are taking the classes and least common” joins ideas without a clear grammatical structure. The phrase “people aged between 11 and 16” also needs a clearer comparison structure. Improve control by separating long sentences and checking articles, determiners, and parallel phrasing. For instance, state the two ballet figures in separate, balanced clauses.

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