Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The pie chart shows the several locations of the dance classes in a particular town in Australia, while the bar chart illustrates the different types of classes filtered by age group.

Overall, In locations private institutes had the highest ratio around half of the total proportion, while college-bases studios had the lowest percentage. Regarding classes type, in ballet and tap dances types childrens under 11 had highest numbers, while in moden dance classes individuals between 11 to 16 had largest share.

Around 48% students went to private studios for their dance classes, while 24% of the students used school halls to practice dance after finishing school study. In contrast, college-based studios had the lowest percnetage of 10%, while the community halls and other locations had 18% contribution.

Individuls under 11 had higest numbers (600) in ballet, while teenage childerns were half of the under 11, showing 300 strength. In contrast, In modern dance classes, teenagers had higher number (520), whereas under eleven childs had 300 total students. However, tap class strength ratio had a good ballance, shwoing 430 students for teenagers and around 450 number of students for under eleven attendies.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You cover both charts and provide a clear overview of the main patterns: private studios are the most common location, college-based studios the least common, and the age groups show different preferences across dance styles. The location figures are reported accurately, and the comparisons for ballet and modern are well supported with numbers. Your tap comparison is also close to the chart, although the teenage figure is approximately 420 rather than 430. This is a small discrepancy and does not undermine the overall account. To strengthen the response further, make the overview more precise—for example, state that under-11s favour ballet while 11–16-year-olds favour modern, and identify the relatively similar tap totals without calling them a “ratio.”

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The response has a clear four-part structure: introduction, overview, location details, and age-group comparisons. This gives the information a logical progression, and linking expressions such as “Overall,” “In contrast,” and “while” help signal comparisons. The two charts are also kept distinct in the body paragraphs, making the account easy to follow. Some cohesion is less controlled, however: “In contrast” is repeated where a direct comparison or a different link would be more natural, and the repeated opening “In…” in the overview and final paragraph interrupts the flow. Improve the transitions between comparisons and use references such as “the older group” consistently to make the progression smoother.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for describing charts, including “proportion,” “percentage,” “highest,” “lowest,” and “higher number.” This is enough to communicate the main comparisons, but word choice and spelling are often inaccurate, which limits precision and naturalness. Examples include “college-bases,” “percnetage,” “Individuls,” “higest,” “moden,” and “shwoing.” Some expressions are also awkward or imprecise: “had a good ballance” and “had 18% contribution” do not sound natural in this context, while “strength” is not the usual term for student totals. Build a more reliable set of chart-description collocations and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentences, including comparisons with “while” and “whereas,” and most of the data remains understandable. However, errors recur in sentence construction, agreement, articles, and punctuation. For example, “Overall, In locations…” has incorrect capitalisation and an awkward sentence opening; “48% students went” needs an article or a different construction; and “teenage childrens were half of the under 11” is not grammatically complete or clear. The final sentence also combines several clauses without consistently controlled punctuation. Practise accurate comparative structures, plural forms, and article use, then proofread each sentence for a clear subject and verb. More reliable complex sentences would improve control.

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