Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The charts illustrate information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Overall, private studios are the most popular location for dance classes, while college based studios are the least popular. Looking at the pie chart, most of the people in town attend private studios, which accounts for 48% overall. The second highest porportion of people attend school halls after school at 24%. Lastly, community halls and other locations account for 18%, while college based studios are the least attended location which accounts for 10% only.

The bar chart illustrates the number of youngsters attendind different kinds of dance classes. Children under 11 attend ballet classes the most, reaching more than 600 participants. Tap and modern dance classes for this age group are attended by approximately 450 and 300 children. On the other hand, children aged 11-16 attend modern dance classes most which goes above 500 participants, while tap classes are attended by almost 420, and lastly, ballet classes are participated by 300 childrends.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover both charts and give a clear overview of the location data, correctly identifying private studios as the largest share and college-based studios as the smallest. The percentages and the ranking of the other locations are also reported accurately. For the bar chart, you make useful comparisons between age groups and correctly identify the leading dance style for each. However, the overview focuses only on locations, and some bar-chart figures are imprecise: under-11 ballet is about 600, not clearly “more than 600,” and 11–16 ballet is about 300. The response therefore addresses the task well, but the main features of both charts are not equally summarised. A concise overview comparing the age-group patterns would make the coverage more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a coherent overall arrangement: an introduction is followed by location information and then comparisons of dance types by age group. Sequencing words such as “Overall,” “Lastly,” and “On the other hand” help readers follow the progression. However, the overview is embedded in the location discussion rather than clearly summarising both charts, and the repeated listing of figures makes parts of the response feel mechanical. The transition into the bar-chart description is understandable, but the comparisons could be grouped more deliberately—for example, first stating the contrasting age-group preferences, then supporting that overview with figures. Clearer paragraphing and more varied, precise referencing would strengthen the flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a suitable range of task vocabulary, including “accounts for,” “participants,” “attend,” and “approximately,” and the meaning is generally clear. However, several word-choice and collocation problems limit precision: “most of the people in town” suggests the chart represents the whole town, while it shows class locations; “porportion” is misspelled; and “ballet classes are participated by” is not a natural expression. “Childrends” is also an inaccurate word form. Repeated use of “attend” and “classes” makes the description less flexible. Aim for accurate chart language such as “the largest share of classes” or “the number of students taking ballet,” and check spelling and collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, including the contrast introduced by “while” and the sentence beginning “On the other hand.” Most meanings remain clear, and the figures are generally easy to follow. Some grammatical errors remain, however. In “the number of youngsters attendind,” the clause needs a relative structure such as “youngsters attending”; “children aged 11–16 attend modern dance classes most which goes above 500” has an unclear subject and faulty clause connection; and “classes … are attended” requires consistent agreement and sentence construction. The final sentence also shifts awkwardly between plural “classes” and singular “300 childrends.” Use shorter, controlled comparisons and check subject–verb agreement and clause structure.

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