Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The below pie chart depicts the information on the location that young people in Australia are currently attending along with the data of types of dance classes they attend to.

Overall, Private studios accounted for highest percentage among Australian people while college-based studios had the lowest share of percentage. Furthermore ballet was the highest attended by young people while modern dance had the lowest share among young people. people between age 11-16 prefered modern dance more than ballet or tap dance.

To Start with, town people prefered private studio location more than any other location, it accounted for 48% out of total people, moreover school halls and community hall had 24% and 18% audience respectively. the remaining share of 10% was college based studios. College based studios were least prefered location among Australians. Moving next to types of dance classes, it had two age groups, people below 11 years and people between 11-16 years. However Ballet was the most popular dance type amongst young children with around 600 students while Tap dance and modern dance accounted for 450 and 300 students respectively. Moreover people between 11-16 were quite opposite, more students were intrested in modern dance with around 500 students but number of students choosing ballet were around half.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover both charts and provide a clear overview, identifying private studios as the largest location share and college-based studios as the smallest. You also note the contrast between younger children’s preference for ballet and the older group’s preference for modern dance. These are the key patterns, and most figures reported are accurate. To make the summary more complete, include the older group’s tap figure (about 420) and compare it with modern (about 520) and ballet (about 300); “around half” is less precise than the chart allows. Also avoid broadening the data to “Australian people” or “Australians”: the charts concern young people in one town. The main features are well selected, but some comparisons need fuller, more precise support.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and paragraphs describing the location and class-type data. This makes the information generally easy to follow. However, some linking is mechanical or unclear. “To Start with” and “Moving next” announce sections rather than showing relationships between the figures, while “Moreover” is used for points that are not always additive. The overview also repeats information later without adding a new comparison. Improve progression by grouping the location percentages together, then comparing the two age groups directly, using clear contrasts such as “whereas” and “by comparison.” Consistent paragraphing and more precise references to each age group would make the organisation smoother.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of task-related vocabulary, including “accounted for,” “percentage,” “share,” “popular,” and “attended.” These choices help communicate the main comparisons, and the meaning is generally clear. However, some expressions are repetitive or imprecise: “share of percentage” is redundant, “audience” is not the best term for students taking classes, and “prefered” and “intrested” are misspelled. “People” is also repeated where “students” or “young people” would be more exact. Aim for natural collocations and accurate spelling, and vary the language used to describe proportions and preferences. This would make the report more precise and fluent without requiring unusually advanced vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentences, including contrastive structures such as “while” and “with,” and most of the message remains understandable. Some grammatical errors persist, however. In the introduction, “the location that young people … are currently attending” uses an unsuitable structure for describing locations; “the locations where young people attend classes” is clearer. The overview has a sentence fragment-like construction in “ballet was the highest attended,” and “people between age 11-16 prefered” needs an article and a past-tense form if reporting the chart as a snapshot. There are also inconsistent capitalisation and punctuation choices, such as “people” after a full stop and “To Start.” Review sentence completeness, articles, and consistent reporting forms to improve control.

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