Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chart illustrates the three categories of dance classes that are been attended by the Australian youths while the pie chart shows the proportion allocated to the venues used.

Overal, Private studio accounted for the highest usage by the young individuals, whereas, the studios based in the college had the lowest patronage. However, there was a dramatic fall in the number of students under the age of 11 that enrolled in the three categories of dance classes.

The students under the age of 11, enrolled more in ballet dance class session than in the other two dance classes. This figure was 600 attendees compared to 450 by tap and 300 by modern dance class. There was an steady increase in the number of students in the 11-16 bracket from 300 in ballet dance to appropriately 530 in modern dance classes.

More students preferred to attend private studios, which accounted for 48%. 24% of the students attended dance sessions organized in the school halls compared fo the 18% amd 10% in the community halls and others and college based studios respectively.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover both charts and identify the main venue pattern: private studios are the most common location at 48%, while college-based studios are least common at 10%. You also compare the age groups across the dance styles and give several relevant figures. However, the overview is partly unclear: the claim of a “dramatic fall” in under-11 participation is not a clear summary of the chart, since the younger group is higher in ballet and tap but lower in modern. The 11–16 figures are also not fully accurate: modern is about 520, not 530, and the response does not report the important pattern that this group’s participation rises from ballet to modern while under-11 participation declines across those styles. A more precise overview would make the comparisons clearer.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, an overview, a paragraph comparing dance styles by age, and a final paragraph on locations. This makes the two chart topics easy to follow. Linking expressions such as “whereas,” “However,” and “compared to” help connect comparisons, and the information is generally presented in a sensible order. Some cohesion is less effective because “However” introduces a contrast that is not clearly explained, and the overview’s reference to a “dramatic fall” does not connect precisely to the figures that follow. The final paragraph also combines several venue comparisons in one long sentence. Use clearer references to the two age groups and separate the venue figures into a more controlled comparison.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.5

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for describing charts, including “proportion,” “accounted for,” “patronage,” and “attendees.” These choices show some willingness to use less common language, and the meaning is generally clear. However, a few expressions are inaccurate or unnatural for this context: “proportion allocated to the venues” is less direct than “share of classes held at each venue,” while “dramatic fall” does not accurately describe the age-group comparison. “Dance class session” and “studios based in the college” are also wordy or awkward. There are spelling errors in “Overal” and “amd,” and “appropriately” is not the intended word when giving an approximate figure. More precise chart vocabulary and careful proofreading would improve flexibility and naturalness.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, including clauses with “whereas” and “which,” and most sentences communicate the intended comparisons. Some grammatical errors remain. In the opening, “that are been attended” has an incorrect verb form; use “that are attended” or “that young people attend.” The overview also needs punctuation and sentence control around “whereas,” and “there was an steady increase” has an article error. In “The students under the age of 11, enrolled,” the comma incorrectly separates the subject from its verb. The final sentence is long and contains a faulty comparison structure. Review verb forms, articles, and punctuation, and break longer comparisons into clearer sentences.

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