Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The pie chart and the bar graph illustrates the data that how many youngsters are currently attending dance classes in an Australian town.

Overall, the private studios get the highest attention as compared to community halls and college-based studios. Schools halls also gathered some significant number of practitioners. The ballet and modern dance types attracted the most students but of different age groups.

Private studios has the significant number of learners of 48% whilst the college-based studios attracts the least number of dance enthusiast, only 10%. Community halls and school halls has also the noticeable range of students.

Childrens under 11, mostly attracted by the ballet dance type, more then 600 students participated in that type. The younger group 11-16, attracted by the modern dance, more then 500 learners participated in that type, The tap dance had a mix response by both age groups, approximately [redacted phone] students participated combinely.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main location feature accurately: private studios account for the largest share (48%), while college-based studios are the smallest (10%). You also compare the age groups in ballet and modern, and note that tap attracts similar numbers. However, the overview is partly inaccurate: ballet and modern do not both attract the most students overall; ballet is strongest among under-11s, while modern leads for ages 11–16. The tap figures are also not combined; each age group has its own value. The location figures for school halls and community halls are not reported precisely. Finally, the response is one word below the required minimum. Include the key comparisons more clearly and support them with accurate figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview, and separate discussion of locations and dance types. This gives the reader some sense of organisation. However, progression is limited: the location details repeat the overview rather than developing the comparison, and the final paragraph moves between age groups and tap without a clear sequence. Linking is also sometimes awkward, as in “whilst” and “The tap dance had a mix response,” and the comma splice before “The tap dance” interrupts the flow. Organise the body into two focused paragraphs—one for locations and one for age-group comparisons—and use clear transitions such as “By contrast” to show differences.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing charts, including “highest,” “least,” “participated,” and “approximately,” and the topic remains understandable. However, several choices are imprecise or unnatural for this task: “get the highest attention,” “practitioners,” “dance enthusiast,” and “mix response” do not describe the chart data naturally. There is also repetition of “students” and “attracted,” while “significant” is used where a neutral description of a proportion would be clearer. Aim for accurate chart language and natural collocations, such as “accounted for,” “the largest share,” and “similar numbers.” Check spelling and word forms, including “Children’s” and “combined.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts a few complex structures, including “as compared to” and “whilst,” but most sentences follow simple patterns and grammatical errors occur often enough to affect smooth reading. For example, “The pie chart and the bar graph illustrates” has subject–verb disagreement; “Private studios has” and “the college-based studios attracts” repeat this problem. The sentence beginning “Childrens under 11” lacks a clear grammatical structure, and the final paragraph contains a comma splice between “type” and “The tap dance.” There are also errors in articles, plurals, and punctuation. Practise building accurate sentences around comparisons, for example: “Among under-11s, ballet was most popular, with about 600 students.”

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