Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The charts provide information about the location and types of dance classes that young people are currently attending in a town in Australia.

Overall, the private studios covered the largest proportion of location of dance classes, whereas the college-based studios has the least coverage. Meanwhile, in terms of types of dance classes, the ballet was attended by the highest number of students that lies in the age group 11-16.

Looking first at location of dance classes, the private studios took 48% of location of dance classes, and the school halls covered 24% of its location. In addition, 18% is allocated to the community halls & other, while the college-based studios got only 10%, the lowest portion of location of dance classes young people are currently attending.

Turning to the types of dance classes, the ballet dance was attended by 600 students, the highest number of students within age group of 11-16. However, compared to the under 11 age group, only 300 students attended the ballet dance. More than 400 students attended the tap dance in the both of the age groups. Furthermore, only 300 under-11 students were the audience of the modern dance, whereas more than 500 students, who lies in the age group of 11-16 have attended the modern dance.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You cover both charts and accurately report the location shares: private studios are largest at 48%, followed by school halls at 24%, community halls at 18%, and college-based studios at 10%. However, the overview misidentifies the leading dance class: ballet is highest among under-11s, at 600, not among 11–16-year-olds; in that older group, modern is highest at about 520. The later comparison also reverses the ballet figures, assigning 600 to the older group and 300 to the younger one. You do report the tap and modern patterns broadly, but the overview and key comparisons need more accurate selection and development. Check each age-group series carefully and summarise the main contrast between ballet for younger students and modern for older students.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The response is clearly organised into an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for the two chart components. The progression from location to dance types is easy to follow, and signposts such as “Looking first” and “Turning to” help guide the reader. Comparisons are also linked with “whereas” and “However.” To make the organisation more effective, ensure that the overview accurately previews the main features, then group the age-group comparisons more systematically—for example, compare all three dance styles across the two groups. Some repeated wording, particularly “location of dance classes,” makes the paragraph less smooth; use concise references such as “these venues” after the category has been introduced.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of task-related vocabulary, including “proportion,” “allocated,” “attended,” and “compared to,” and the meaning is generally clear. There are, however, several imprecise or unnatural collocations. “The private studios covered the largest proportion of location” and “the college-based studios got only 10%” are less suitable ways to describe chart shares; “accounted for” or “represented” would be more precise. “Were the audience of the modern dance” is also an awkward expression for students taking classes. Repeated use of “location of dance classes” limits flexibility. Aim for accurate reporting verbs and natural collocations, while varying references to venues and student numbers.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including clauses introduced by “whereas” and “while,” and most sentences communicate the intended meaning. Some grammatical errors remain. In the overview, “the college-based studios has” has a subject–verb agreement error; use “have.” The phrase “the highest number of students that lies in the age group” has an unclear relative clause and agreement problem; a clearer structure is “the highest number was among students under 11.” There are also inconsistent tense and sentence patterns, such as “18% is allocated” alongside past-tense reporting. In “students, who lies,” the verb should agree with the plural noun, and the comma before the defining clause is unnecessary. Review agreement, clause construction, and consistent tense.

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