Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

This graph shows the locations and types of dance classes of young people in Australia.The graph demonstrates that private studios for dance classes are in more ratio than others and the least locations of dance classes are showed in college-based studios.As seeing the whole chart,we can see that young people go more to private studios,then to the school halls and then community halls and least is the college based studios.People prefer private studios more than the others.

As to discuss types of dance classes, about 600 people that are under 11 come in ballet type while only 300 people from 11-16 age choose the ballet type dance classes.In the tap,450 people who are under 11 choose this type while the people from 11 to 16 age,400 people attend these dance classes.In the modern dance classes, only 300 people under 11 go there as compared to the people under 11-16 are 500.The whole chart shows that people of age 11 attend more ballet and tap classes but in modern dance classes,the people from 11 to 16 age prefer this class more than the two others.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You cover both charts and identify the main location pattern: private studios are the most common venue, while college-based studios are the least common. You also compare age groups across ballet, tap and modern, including the broad contrast that younger students favour ballet and older students favour modern. However, some details are inaccurate or unclear: the older group’s tap figure is about 420, not 400, and the final sentence says “people of age 11” attend more ballet and tap, although the figures show under-11s lead in ballet and the older group leads slightly in tap. The overview repeats the location ranking rather than summarising the key age-group contrasts. More precise reporting and a clearer overview would strengthen coverage.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic overall structure, moving from the location chart to the dance types, and the second paragraph generally follows the categories in a sensible order. Some linking phrases, such as “As to discuss” and “In the tap,” signal transitions, but they are awkward or repetitive, and the first paragraph repeats the same point about private studios several times. The final sentence attempts to summarise the age comparisons, yet its meaning is difficult to follow and it conflicts with the figures. Use a concise overview, then group the age data by the clearest contrasts, with accurate references such as “the younger group” and “the older group.” This would create clearer progression and reduce repetition.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is sufficient to name the chart categories and make basic comparisons, using terms such as “private studios,” “ballet,” “compared to” and “prefer.” However, the range is limited and several phrases are unnatural or imprecise, including “in more ratio,” “least locations,” “come in ballet type” and “go there.” Repetition of “people,” “dance classes” and “type” also makes the description less fluent. Choose standard chart-reporting language and vary it carefully: for example, describe the proportion of classes held at each venue, or say that students attend or take a particular style. More precise collocations would make the information easier to understand without requiring more complex vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences with comparisons, but the range is limited and errors recur in sentence construction, agreement and punctuation. For example, “the least locations of dance classes are showed” has an incorrect verb form, while “the people from 11 to 16 age, 400 people attend” is not formed as a clear comparison. The final sentence also has a confusing age-group construction. Several sentences run together without spaces after full stops or commas, as in “Australia.The” and “chart,we,” which affects readability. Practise building accurate simple comparison sentences first, then combine them with clauses such as “whereas” or “while.” Check verb forms, articles and punctuation when editing.

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