Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The chart shows the information about the different types of dance classes young people in town of australia are attending. This includes location of the classes, type of dance accoridng to the age group. Types of dances are ballet, tap and modern.

First, if we look ata community halls and other, it carrys 18%. school halls has 24%. If we talk about lowest % then the college based studios has only 10% which is the lowest among all. Now the most percentage carries is private studios which is 48%

Types of dance classes according to age where there are around 600 people under the age of 11 for the ballet dance. Whereas around only 300 of the people from age 11 to 16. Tap dance has more than 400 people of age 11 who are attending and around 400 people, age between 11 to 16. Lastly we have modern dance where surprisingly number of people from age 11 to 16 are high, which is more than 500 and people of age 11 are only 300 for modern dance.

This shows most of the people age of 11 are mostly intrested in ballet whereas age between 11 to 16 are most likely to go with modern dance. After all number of ballet is more than modern dance.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You cover both charts and identify several important features, including private studios as the most common location (48%) and college-based studios as the least common (10%). You also make useful age-group comparisons for ballet and modern. However, some figures are inaccurate or unclear: tap is about 450 students under 11 and 420 aged 11–16, but you describe these as “more than 400” and “around 400” without clearly assigning each figure. The final claim that ballet numbers exceed modern overall is not supported: the combined totals are approximately equal. Your overview is also limited; state the main contrast across the age groups and summarise the location pattern more directly. More precise reporting and a clearer overview would strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, a paragraph on locations, a paragraph comparing dance types, and a concluding statement. This gives the reader a basic route through the information. However, progression is sometimes mechanical, with repeated openings such as “First,” “If we talk about,” and “Lastly,” rather than clear links between related comparisons. The final paragraph repeats points already made and introduces a broad conclusion about total ballet and modern participation without showing how it follows from the figures. Some references are also unclear, particularly “people of age 11” when the chart category is under 11. Group the location figures together, then compare the two age groups consistently for each dance style, using clearer referencing.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough task-related vocabulary to communicate the chart’s subject, including “percentage,” “age group,” “ballet,” “tap,” and “modern.” However, the range is limited and several expressions are repetitive or imprecise, such as “people” and “number of people” for student counts, and “most percentage carries” for the largest share. Some word forms and spelling errors, including “intrested” and “accoridng,” reduce accuracy. “Go with modern dance” is conversational rather than suitable for an academic report. Aim for precise chart language and more varied reporting verbs, such as “account for,” “attend,” “record,” and “the figure for.” This would make comparisons clearer and the tone more consistently academic.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences and comparisons, for example, “Whereas around only 300 of the people from age 11 to 16,” but this is a fragment rather than a complete sentence. Errors in sentence structure and agreement occur frequently: “it carrys 18%,” “school halls has 24%,” and “the college based studios has only 10%.” Articles and prepositions are also often missing or awkward, as in “in town of australia” and “people of age 11.” These problems sometimes make the intended comparison difficult to follow. Most sentences rely on simple patterns, with limited accurate control of complex forms. Practise complete comparative sentences, checking subject–verb agreement and articles—for example, “Private studios account for 48%, while college-based studios account for 10%.”

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