Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

There is differenent famous sights of dance classes are community halls and other different with eighteen percent. And also private studios also contribuated like 48%. and schools halls after children goes to home is 24%. There is another location is College based studios which take 10%. There is also some participation rules of diffeent age groups is under 11 years olds are go to school halls after school. And 11 to 16 age group go community halls and other areas. There is ballet dance performers are in 600 numbers. And for age group 11 to 16 is reduced.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify several figures from the location chart, including private studios at 48%, school halls at 24%, community halls and other venues at 18%, and college-based studios at 10%. However, the response does not give a clear overview of the main patterns, and the age-group statements about where young people attend classes are not supported by the charts. The dance-type data are only partly reported: you mention 600 ballet students but omit the other figures and make the unclear claim that the older group is “reduced.” The response is also 52 words below the required minimum, which leaves the task substantially incomplete. To improve, summarise the main contrasts and accurately compare all three dance styles across both age groups.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

The response contains some relevant information, and the sequence moves from class locations to age groups and then ballet. However, it is presented as one continuous block without a clear introduction, overview, or organised comparison of the two charts. Repeated openings such as “And also” and “There is” make the progression feel list-like, while links between ideas are sometimes unclear—for example, the shift from venue percentages to claims about where each age group goes. Use separate paragraphs for the location chart and dance-type chart, and connect figures through direct comparisons. A brief overview near the beginning would also help the reader understand the main patterns before the details.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “community halls,” “private studios,” “age group,” and “ballet,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, such as “famous sights of dance classes,” “contribuated,” and “participation rules.” These expressions make some points difficult to interpret, and spelling errors such as “diffeent” and “contribuated” reduce precision. Aim for standard chart-reporting language and accurate forms: describe the “proportion” attending each venue, or the “number of students” taking each style. More precise vocabulary would help you report comparisons without relying on vague phrases such as “is reduced.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

There are attempts to communicate several separate facts, but most sentences rely on simple patterns and are not consistently well formed. For example, “There is differenent famous sights of dance classes are…” combines incompatible sentence structures, and “under 11 years olds are go” uses an incorrect verb form. Agreement and sentence construction are also problematic in “private studios also contribuated like 48%.” These errors sometimes make the intended relationships unclear. Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, such as “Private studios account for 48% of classes.” Then use a small range of accurate comparison structures, for example, “Ballet is more popular among under-11s than among 11–16-year-olds.”

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