Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

If we talk about Location of dance classes in Australia, majority of dance classes conduct in private studios,around 48%.After private studios, school halls conduct majority of dance classes.They conduct dance classes after the school time.After that,community halls and other halls available across the town conduct 18% of dance classes happening in a town of Australia.College based studios share the least portion in our pictorial representation of location of dance classes.They conduct only 10% of the dance classes across the town.

If we analyse this data,we can interpret that private studios are the most popular and renowned places for dance classes.They conduct nearly 50% of the dance classes happening in town while the college based studios are not usually used for dance classes with few exceptions so, it holds only 10% portion of diagram.

Now we will talk about types of dance classes and which age group prefer which type of dance.From statistics,Children under 11 years of age mostly do ballet dance.Around just above 600 students from our data under 11 do Ballet while 300 students from 11 to 16 years do ballet.Nearly equal number of students from both age groups do tap dance wirh students under 11 taking a slight lead.11 to 16 years old students mostly do Modern dance,more than 500 students in our survey while 300 students of under 11 age group do modern dance

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You cover both charts and identify several key comparisons: private studios are the largest location category, college-based studios the smallest, and preferences differ by age for ballet and modern. Most figures are broadly consistent with the chart. However, the overview is not clearly separated or fully developed, and some claims go beyond the data: “renowned” and the suggestion that colleges are “not usually used … with few exceptions” are not shown by the chart. The location figures could be compared more precisely, especially school halls at 24% versus community halls at 18%. You also describe tap as a slight lead for under-11s, although the figures are close (450 versus 420). A clearer overview and strictly data-based reporting would strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a generally understandable sequence: it discusses class locations first and age-group preferences second, with paragraph breaks marking the shift. Phrases such as “After private studios” and “Now we will talk about” help signal progression. However, the organisation is somewhat repetitive and mechanical. The first two paragraphs repeat that private studios are the most popular and colleges have the smallest share, while “If we analyse this data” does not introduce a distinct new point. Some transitions are awkward, and the final paragraph ends without a concluding overview. Grouping the location comparisons into one concise paragraph, followed by a paragraph comparing the three dance styles, would make the progression clearer and reduce repetition.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for describing charts, including “portion,” “share,” “statistics,” and “age group,” and the reader can generally understand the comparisons. However, the range is limited by repeated wording such as “conduct dance classes” and “dance classes happening,” and several choices are imprecise or unnatural. For example, “renowned places” describes reputation rather than the proportion of classes, while “pictorial representation” is unnecessarily elaborate. There are also spelling and spacing slips, including “wirh” and missing spaces after punctuation, which reduce polish. Aim for concise chart language and accurate collocations, such as “account for,” “percentage,” and “students attend.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt some longer sentences and comparisons, for example, “while the college based studios are not usually used for dance classes,” and the main meaning is usually recoverable. However, sentence structures are often awkward or incomplete, and punctuation makes several sentences run together. Examples include “majority of dance classes conduct in private studios” and “They conduct dance classes after the school time,” where the subject and verb pattern are not well formed. Articles and prepositions are also frequently missing or inaccurate, as in “in town” and “under 11 age group.” Use complete, controlled sentences, check subject–verb patterns, and separate ideas with full stops. More accurate simple structures would improve clarity before you attempt longer ones.

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