Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The pie chart belows give information on the location ad types of dance classes among youth people in a town in Australia are current attending.

Overall,there is comparsion of locatin of dance classes along with types of dance,we have large portion of private studios and followed by school halls,and in wich we have ballet,tap and modern class type.

private studios has large ratio of 48% in the chart ,community halls and other has 1

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response identifies the general subject and correctly notes that private studios account for the largest share, giving 48%. However, it does not adequately summarise the charts: the second chart’s age-group comparisons are not reported, and the location figures are mostly omitted. The phrase “followed by school halls” is broadly accurate, but no percentage is given, while “community halls and other has 1” is incomplete and does not match the chart’s 18%. The overview is also too vague to highlight the main patterns. The response is substantially below the required 150 words, leaving the task only minimally addressed. To improve, report the key location proportions and compare the dance preferences of the two age groups using the chart’s approximate figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response with an opening statement, an overview beginning “Overall,” and a further detail sentence. This gives the reader some indication of the intended structure. However, the progression is not sustained: the overview repeats the task rather than clearly grouping the chart information, and the final sentence stops abruptly after “has 1,” leaving the point unfinished. The link “and followed by” is awkward, and the reference to “we have” does not clearly connect the location chart with the age-group chart. Use separate, complete paragraphs for the overview and key details, and connect comparisons explicitly—for example, contrast the leading location with the age-group patterns.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses a small set of relevant terms, including “private studios,” “school halls,” “ballet,” “tap,” and “modern,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the vocabulary is limited and several spelling or word-choice errors make the writing less clear, such as “belows,” “ad,” “youth people,” “comparsion,” and “locatin.” “Large portion” and “large ratio” are understandable but imprecise for describing chart data; “largest share” or “accounted for” would be more natural. The unfinished phrase “has 1” also prevents the reader from knowing the intended figure. Build a reliable set of chart-reporting expressions and check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both a simple opening sentence and a longer overview sentence, but the range of sentence structures remains narrow and control is inconsistent. For example, “The pie chart belows give information” has a subject–verb agreement problem, while “private studios has large ratio” also uses an incorrect verb form and lacks an article before “large ratio.” The sentence beginning “Overall” is difficult to follow because its clauses are joined without a clear grammatical structure. Punctuation is also inconsistent, including the missing space after “Overall,” and the lowercase start to “private studios.” Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add controlled comparisons using forms such as “whereas” and “accounted for.”

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