Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

This bar chart illustrates the percentage differences between the location of dance classes in Australia. Also, the type of dance classes performed by students of different age groups.

First of all, the Pie chart shows almost around 48% students attending classes are in private studios. Which means this is the most popular location for practice as, it shows the highest ratio. Moreover, in school halls youngsters displayed the ratio of 24%. Which is the second most highest. Furthermore, the community halls and others showed around 18% of attendees. Which means it is not the same as the rest. In last, the least is the college based studio. Which is nearly 10%.

In contrast, the second chart also explains the types of dance classes performed by different age students. The ballet dance is performed mostly under 11 age group. Whereas, the tap dance is also performed under 11 age group. The graph displays the modern dance is more practiced by the age group above 11.

In conclusion, the total numbers of students that are shown in graph is likely higher. It shows almost around 600 of total students, participating in three categories of dance types.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the main location pattern accurately: private studios are the largest share at 48%, followed by school halls at 24%, while college-based studios are the smallest at 10%. However, the response only partially reports the second chart. It correctly notes that ballet is more popular among under-11s and modern among 11–16-year-olds, but incorrectly says tap is also more popular among the younger group; the figures are about 450 younger students versus 420 older students, so this difference is small. The conclusion that “almost around 600” students participate in three categories is unclear and does not summarise the overall comparison. Include the key figures for all three dance styles and give a clear overview of the contrasting age-group preferences to develop the report more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, moving from an introduction to the location chart, then the dance types, and finally a conclusion. This gives the reader a basic route through the information. However, progression is weakened by repetitive sequencing phrases such as “First of all,” “Moreover,” “Furthermore,” and “In last,” which often list details rather than show meaningful comparisons. Several sentence fragments beginning “Which means” interrupt the flow, and the final conclusion does not clearly connect to the chart’s main patterns. Grouping the location figures into a concise comparison and then comparing the two age groups across each dance style would create clearer progression. Use linking expressions selectively and ensure each sentence has a clear connection to the one before it.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “ratio,” “attendees,” and “age group,” and the reader can generally understand the topic. However, word choice and collocation are often imprecise or repetitive. For example, “percentage differences” does not accurately describe the chart, which shows the distribution of class locations, and “dance classes performed” is less natural than language describing classes students attend. “The same as the rest” is vague, while “most highest” is an incorrect and redundant form. Aim for precise reporting verbs and comparison phrases, such as “accounted for,” “was the second-largest share,” and “was more popular among.” This would make the vocabulary more natural and better suited to describing numerical data.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

There are attempts to use more than simple statements, including “Which means this is the most popular location” and the contrast introduced by “Whereas.” However, sentence control is uneven, and several sentences are fragments: “Which means it is not the same as the rest” cannot stand independently, and “In last, the least is the college based studio” is also awkwardly formed. The opening uses two separate sentences where the second is incomplete (“Also, the type of dance classes…”). Punctuation is sometimes misplaced, as in “practice as, it shows,” and articles or plural forms are not consistently controlled. Build complete sentences around the comparisons, and check clause structure and punctuation when joining ideas.

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