Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie chart and the bar graph illustrates the location and the types of dance classes respectively. The young which are attending the classes are from Australia.

Overall, from pie chart it can be concluded that the private studios has the highest figure while school halls and community hall are almost similar. The. College based studios are the least preferable from students. On the other hand, bar chart have the highest fraction in the age group of under 11 in the ballet class,however, the other age group has the least interest in this class. From age 11 to 16 the highest fraction class is the modern.

From pie chart it can be seen that private studios have the highest fraction is at 48%having the majority of the preference of students. The school halls, community halls and others are at 24%and 18% respectively. The college based studios is least preferable location of students for classes which is at 10%.

The bar chart illustrates the preference of students under 11 in the ballet and tap class at 600 and 400 respectively more than the other group.In ballet and tap class age group from 11 to 16 have 300 and 400 students respectively. While in the modern class it can be seen that the age group 11to16 has the highest fraction than the under 11 age group students.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover both charts and provide a clear overview: private studios are the most common location, college-based studios the least common, and the leading dance style differs by age group. Several figures are reported accurately, including the location percentages and the ballet totals. This meets the task well, with some features more fully described than others. However, the overview says school halls and community halls are “almost similar,” although their shares are 24% and 18%, and the bar-chart details give tap as about 400–450 rather than the chart’s approximate 450 and 420. You also identify modern as the leading style for 11–16-year-olds but do not report its figures. More precise comparisons and consistent data would strengthen the response further.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs describing the location and dance-type charts. This makes the main information reasonably easy to follow. You also use basic linking expressions such as “Overall,” “On the other hand,” and “While.” However, some connections are mechanical or unclear, and the overview’s “On the other hand” shifts between charts without a precise relationship. The final paragraph combines several comparisons in a long sentence, while “more than the other group” does not clearly identify which figures are being compared. Improve progression by grouping each age group’s figures consistently and using clear references such as “by contrast” only when the comparison is explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “pie chart,” “bar graph,” “preference,” “age group,” and “highest,” so the reader can understand the topic and most comparisons. There is also some attempt to vary wording with “least preferable” and “majority.” However, several phrases are unnatural or imprecise, particularly the repeated use of “fraction” for percentages or student numbers, and “has the highest fraction is at 48%.” “The young which are attending” is also an awkward way to refer to the participants. These choices make the description less fluent and precise, though the intended meaning is generally recoverable. Use standard chart collocations such as “accounted for,” “proportion,” and “number of students,” and avoid repeating “preference” when describing locations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a contrast with “While” and clauses introduced by “which.” However, errors in agreement, sentence construction, articles, and punctuation are frequent enough to make some sentences difficult to read. For example, “The pie chart and the bar graph illustrates” needs a plural verb, while “The college based studios is” has a plural subject with a singular verb. The construction “private studios have the highest fraction is at 48%” is incomplete or incorrectly joined. Punctuation and spacing also need attention, as in “class,however” and “48%having.” Practise building one clear main clause before adding comparisons, and check subject–verb agreement and sentence boundaries during proofreading.

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