Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The pie chart beloe describes the information on the location and type of dance classes young people in a city in Australia are currently attending.

Very first, the location of dance classes are different 18% of the people are attending classes in community hall and other.The private studio is leading in this chart with 48% of the people.The people who are attending it after school are doing it in school halls.Remaining 10% attenders are going to college based studios.

Moreover, If we talk about the dance classes by the age group.The amount of people who are under 11 are 600 and they are learning ballet and who are 11-16 age are 300.

The people who are under 11 are 400+ and 11-16 are 400 and learning tap.

Furthermore, In the modern dance the ratio of under 11 is less than 11-16 under 11 people are 300 and 11-16 are 500+.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify both chart topics and report several relevant figures, including 48% for private studios and the age-group figures for ballet and modern dance. However, the response only partially summarises the data: it gives no clear overall overview of the main patterns, and some figures are inaccurate. For tap, the chart shows about 450 students under 11 and 420 aged 11–16, rather than “400+” and 400; modern is about 300 and 520, so “500+” is broadly accurate. The location section also does not state the 24% attending school halls, and the after-school sentence does not clearly report that figure. Include the key comparisons and check each number against the chart.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic sequence: it first discusses locations, then moves to the dance styles, using markers such as “Moreover” and “Furthermore.” This gives the reader some sense of organisation. However, progression within the paragraphs is uneven, and several links between ideas are unclear. For example, “The people who are attending it after school are doing it in school halls” does not clearly connect to the 24% figure, while the ballet sentence combines two age groups without making the comparison easy to follow. The repeated “The people who are…” structure also makes the report feel list-like. Group the information by chart and use direct comparisons to create a clearer progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic vocabulary to identify the main categories, including “private studio,” “community hall,” “ballet,” “tap,” and “modern dance.” However, the range is limited and some word choices or collocations make the report less precise, such as “the ratio of under 11” and “the people who are under 11 are 400+.” “Ratio” is not the right term for comparing student numbers, and “people” is less suitable than “students” in this context. There is also a spelling error in “bel oe” (“bel oe” appears as “bel oe” in the opening). Aim for concise chart language such as “accounted for,” “approximately,” and “the figure for,” while checking spelling and natural phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences, but most structures are simple or joined in ways that are not fully controlled. Errors in agreement and sentence construction appear in “the location of dance classes are different” and “the amount of people who are under 11 are 600.” The opening “Very first” is also followed by a sentence fragment-like sequence, and punctuation is often missing after sentence boundaries, as in “other.The private studio.” Capitalisation is inconsistent in “If” and “Moreover.” These issues sometimes make relationships between figures difficult to follow. Practise accurate comparison patterns, for example, “There were about 600 under-11 students in ballet, compared with 300 aged 11–16,” and check agreement and punctuation.

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