Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The given pie chart illustrates the information on the location of dance classes. While, the given bar chart demonstrates the type of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Overall, private studios has the highest share and the college based studios has the lowest share in the location of dance classes. Furthermore, ballet is most popular amoung under 11 students and modern dance is most popular amoung teenagers.

Private studios has the largest contribution of 48 percent, followed by the school halls 24 percent. The community halls and other contibute the 18 percent while the 10 percent is for college based studios, least popular amoung all the locations.

Almost 600 students who are under 11 participate in ballet dance, roughly double from the teenagers. Tap dance is equally popular between children and teenagers, approxmately 420 teenagers and 450 children are participating in it. Modern dance is popular amoung teenagers instead of children because the 520 teenagers show intererst in it and only 300 children do modern dance.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

The response covers both charts and gives a clear overview of the main contrasts: private studios account for the largest share, college-based studios the smallest, and the leading dance style differs by age group. Most figures are reported accurately, including the 48%, 24%, 18% and 10% location shares and the approximate student numbers. The comparison of ballet participation is also clear. However, the overview says tap is “equally popular” between age groups, whereas the chart shows a modest difference (about 450 under-11s versus 420 aged 11–16). The description of the dance-type chart could also compare all three styles more systematically. Overall, the key features are selected and supported, though a little over-generalisation and uneven development remain.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response is arranged in a sensible sequence: introduction, overview, location details, then comparisons of dance types. This makes the information easy to follow, and linking phrases such as “Overall,” “followed by,” and “Furthermore” help signal relationships. The paragraphing is appropriate and the reader can distinguish the two chart topics. To make the progression more flexible and precise, avoid relying on repeated “while” and “and” constructions, and connect comparisons more explicitly—for example, contrast the age groups within each dance style in a consistent order. The opening “While,” is also an incomplete transition because it is followed by a separate sentence. Cohesion is generally clear, but some links feel mechanical or imprecise rather than fully controlled.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

The vocabulary is adequate for describing the charts, with useful terms such as “largest,” “followed by,” “participate,” and “popular.” The writer also attempts more formal reporting language, including “illustrates” and “contribution,” and meaning remains clear throughout. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or repetitive: “largest contribution” is less natural than “largest share,” and “show interest in it” does not precisely describe the number of students attending classes. There are also spelling errors, including “amoung,” “contibute,” “approxmately,” and “intererst.” Use a wider set of accurate chart-reporting expressions and check spelling carefully; this would make the description more precise and polished.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The response includes both simple statements and some attempts at more complex structures, such as “because the 520 teenagers show interest in it and only 300 children do modern dance.” The main comparisons are usually understandable. However, errors in agreement and sentence construction recur: “private studios has” and “the college based studios has” should use plural agreement, while “While, the given bar chart…” is not a complete, correctly punctuated opening clause. Articles and phrasing are also sometimes awkward, as in “contribute the 18 percent.” Most sentences communicate their intended meaning, but control is not consistent enough for a higher level. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement and build complex comparisons with complete clauses and clear punctuation.

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