Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The pie chart illustrates the proportion of dance class location and the bar graph shows the type of dance class for a specific age group in a town in Australia are currently attending. Overall, the private studios accounted for the largest share. While, the college-based studios had least share amoung all other. From the given bar graph, type of dance depends on the c Interest choosen by a specific age group.

It is clear that the private studios are most common location for dance class, dominated other locations, almost half a portion. School halls accounted for the second largest share, almost quarter half. In contrast the college-based studios had the smallest share, with 10%.

From the figure the graph fell dradually, by under 11 age, viseversa, for 11-16 age group increased. The ballet stood at the peak with 600 students. Whereas, the modren dance contributed more than 500 students. Ballet dance and modren dance had same number of participants, with 300 students but different age groups, under 11 and 11-16 age group

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main location pattern: private studios are the largest category and college-based studios the smallest, and you include several relevant figures. However, the overview of the dance types is unclear and does not accurately summarise the age-group trends. The chart shows under-11 participation highest in ballet (600) and lowest in modern (300), while among 11–16-year-olds modern is highest (about 520) and ballet lowest (300); tap is about 450 and 420 respectively. Your statement that the graph “fell gradually” and then “increased” does not explain these comparisons, and “ballet and modern dance had same number” is ambiguous. Also, school halls represent about a quarter, not “almost quarter half.” Select the key contrasts and report them precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has an introduction, an overview, and further detail, so the reader can recognise an attempt to organise the report. However, progression is not consistently clear: the overview moves from locations to an incomplete comment about age-group preferences, and the final paragraph combines several comparisons without explaining their relationship. Linking expressions such as “While,” “In contrast,” and “Whereas” are used, but some connections are faulty or leave fragments—for example, “While, the college-based studios had least share” and “Whereas, the modren dance contributed more than 500 students.” The reference to “the graph” is also unclear because two charts are presented. Group the location data together, then compare the two age groups by dance type, using clear topic sentences and links.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “proportion,” “accounted for,” “largest share,” and “participants,” which helps communicate the subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unclear, such as “almost quarter half,” “the graph fell gradually,” and “type of dance depends on the c Interest choosen.” Spelling errors—including “amoung,” “viseversa,” and “modren”—also make the report less clear and reduce the precision expected in describing data. Aim for accurate, conventional chart language and check spelling carefully. For example, describe figures as “the number of students” rising or falling, and use “accounted for approximately a quarter” rather than an unclear fraction.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

There are attempts to use complex structures, including “While…” and “Ballet dance and modern dance had same number of participants, with 300 students but different age groups.” However, many sentences contain grammatical errors that make relationships difficult to follow. The opening sentence has faulty agreement and structure: “the bar graph shows the type … for a specific age group … are currently attending.” Articles are missing in “had least share” and “had same number,” and the clause beginning “From the figure the graph fell…” is not formed clearly. Punctuation also creates fragments after “While” and “Whereas.” Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check articles, agreement, and clause boundaries.

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