Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie chart illustrates data about the location of different types of dance classes and bar chart depict information of people by their age groups attending these classes in the city of Australia.

Overall, there has four different locations and three catagories of dance classes. Private studios seemed to be the largest proporton in the pie chart, while the least share is college-based studios. Contribution of under 11 students is the highest in the table given.

Location of dance classes, private studios accounted for 48%, which is the largest share in all of four. As comparison, school halls ( after-schools) represented for 24%. Similarly, Community halls and other consituted to 18% of the students, while college-based studios stood at 10% of the pupils.

Under 11, 600 students are participating in ballet dance class, while around 450 students in tap class and this figure then fell sharly to 300 pupils in Modern class.

Meanwhile, 11-16 number of participants are 500 in Modern, then dipped to 400 students in tap, while the only 300 students are in the ballet class.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You cover both charts and identify the main location pattern: private studios are the largest share at 48%, while college-based studios are smallest at 10%. You also compare the dance styles across the two age groups. However, the overview is partly unclear and includes an unsupported claim that under-11s make the highest contribution overall; the charts show separate age-group figures, with older students leading in modern dance. Some figures are also inaccurate: the 11–16 figures are about 520 for modern and 420 for tap, rather than 500 and 400. To strengthen the response, give a clearer overview of the contrasting age-group preferences and report the key comparisons accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, a paragraph on locations and a paragraph comparing dance styles. This makes the information generally easy to follow. Linking expressions such as “while,” “similarly” and “meanwhile” help signal comparisons, although some transitions feel mechanical, and the opening of the location paragraph (“Location of dance classes, private studios…”) is not a complete, clear lead-in. The overview also moves from locations to an unclear statement about under-11 students without explaining the relationship. Use topic sentences that identify the chart or comparison, and organise the overview around the most important contrasts before presenting supporting figures.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of task-related vocabulary, including “accounted for,” “represented,” “constituted” and “stood at,” which helps describe proportions. There are also attempts at varied trend language, such as “fell” and “dipped.” However, several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or awkward: “largest proporton” should be “largest proportion,” “Contribution of under 11 students” is unclear, and “participating in ballet dance class” is less natural than “taking ballet classes.” Spelling errors such as “catagories,” “consituted” and “sharly” are noticeable. Aim for precise chart vocabulary and check spelling, while avoiding unnecessary variation when a simpler phrase is more accurate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, and most of the comparisons remain understandable. Some grammatical errors, however, affect clarity and control. For example, “bar chart depict” needs subject–verb agreement (“the bar chart depicts”), while “Overall, there has four different locations” should be “there are four different locations.” The phrase “As comparison” needs a grammatical form such as “By comparison,” and “school halls … represented for 24%” has an incorrect verb pattern. There are also awkward sentence fragments, including “Under 11, 600 students are participating…”. Practise accurate agreement, articles and complete sentence structures, especially when introducing figures and comparisons.

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