Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The pie chat illustrates information on the location of dance classes furthermore, the graph displays what types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Overall, in the private studios have highest proportion of dance classes while, college based studios has lowest. School halls and community halls & other have moderate. Ballet has most favourite dance class of children's but, younger people have minimal. In the younger people they attended modern classes but, children was least. Tap have remain same in the children and younger people.

Private studios have maximum proportion of dance classes from 8%. College based studios have smallest percentage of dance classes form 10%. While, school halls and community halls and other have approximately same from 24% and 18% respectively.

Ballet has greater number of students in under 11 age group with 600 students while, the smaller number of students in 11 to 16 age group, with 300 students. In addition, modern has the maximum number of students above 500 by the age group of 11 to 16 however, by under 11 age group students 300 students attent this dance class. Tap has nearly same number of students under 11 and 11 to 16 age group with 400 students.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The response covers both charts and gives an overview, identifying private studios as the most common location and college-based studios as the least common. It also reports several useful age-group comparisons, including ballet at 600 versus 300 students and modern at 300 versus just over 500. However, some key details are inaccurate or unclear: private studios account for 48%, not 8%, and the claim that ballet is the most popular overall is not supported across both age groups. Tap is described as having about 400 students in each group, although the figures are approximately 450 and 420. The overview also mislabels the age groups as “children” and “younger people.” More precise comparisons and a clearer summary of the contrasting preferences would strengthen coverage.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate discussion of locations and dance types. This helps the reader identify the two charts being described. However, progression within paragraphs is not always clear, and several linking words are used inaccurately or mechanically. For example, “furthermore” joins the two chart descriptions without showing a meaningful relationship, while repeated “while” and “but” constructions make comparisons difficult to follow. The overview also combines several points in a confusing sequence. Organise the body into one paragraph on locations and one on age-group preferences, and use direct comparison language such as “whereas” or “by contrast” only when the figures genuinely differ.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses relevant chart vocabulary, including “proportion,” “percentage,” “age group,” and “number of students,” so the topic is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes obscuring the intended meaning. Examples include “Ballet has most favourite dance class,” “have maximum proportion,” and “Tap have remain same.” “Younger people” is also an imprecise label for the 11–16 group when contrasted with children under 11. Spelling errors such as “chat” for “chart” and “attend” written as “attent” further reduce accuracy. Aim for standard data-reporting phrases and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

There are attempts to use complex sentences and comparisons, for example, “Ballet has greater number of students in under 11 age group … while…” However, sentence structures are often faulty, and errors in articles, agreement, verb forms, and punctuation recur. Examples include “the private studios have highest proportion,” “college based studios has lowest,” and “Tap have remain same.” The sentence beginning “In the younger people they attended…” has an unclear construction, while commas before “but” and “while” are frequently misplaced. These errors sometimes make relationships between ideas harder to understand. Practise accurate simple comparison sentences first, then combine them using controlled clauses and consistent present-tense forms.

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